Talk:Paradise (nightclub)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Most Comfortable Chair (talk · contribs) 12:35, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

Hello. I will have the review in a day or two. Thank you. — The Most Comfortable Chair 12:35, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

@The Most Comfortable Chair: Thanks for taking this on! Armadillopteryx 00:57, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

Lead, Infobox, and Description

• Asbury Park, New Jersey → Asbury Park, New Jersey.
  • Is there something in the MOS about this? Most quality articles I have seen link both the city and the state (and preferably as a single link per MOS:SEAOFBLUE). Some FAs where this format appears in the infobox are here, here and here.

Miss Paradise pageant

• "Miss Paradise 2019, Mancie Mandell, was succeeded by the current reigning Miss Paradise, Olivia Lux, in February 2020" — While there is nothing wrong with this statement per se, I would recommend removing "the current reigning". As it is, it could read more like a live report on what is happening, instead of a historical note on what has happened.
  •  Done
• "That year's edition of the pageant featured a celebrity judge, Margaret Josephs of The Real Housewives of New Jersey" — Perhaps the part of her mother Marge Sr. being a judge with her could be included.
  •  Done

History

Background and early years

• "at which time the facilities had been non-operational for more than a decade." — Operations of the hotel and the nightclub or just the latter? Please note that if it is the latter.
  • It was both. A few sentences later comes the bit about the new owner reopening the club first and then reopening the hotel several years later.

2010s to present

• "June 2020" — Perhaps it could be linked to LGBT Pride Month?
  •  Done
• "Paradise was able to reopen its tiki bar and pool area for outdoor service in the summer." — Could a month or date be mentioned instead of "summer"? If yes, it should be changed in the lead as well.
  • One of the inline citations is from June 1 and only says the club will be reopening "imminently", while the other is from August 23 and just says the pool and tiki bar "were able to open this summer". The club's Instagram profile has a post with exact dates of reopening (June 15 for the tiki bar and June 22 for the pool) [1]. It is technically permissible to use this as a source per WP:ABOUTSELF, though most people consider social media to be low-quality sourcing. Would you prefer that I add the Instagram source and the dates or stick with the current wording and news article sourcing?

That will be all for now. It is a good read and should pass. Thank you for your work! — The Most Comfortable Chair 12:51, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

Thank you very much for the review! Armadillopteryx 18:33, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

Final

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   The article is short but focused and covers every major aspect. It is a good read and meets the criteria. Thank you for your work! — The Most Comfortable Chair 04:57, 4 October 2020 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.