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Did you know nomination

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Theleekycauldron (talk09:09, 5 December 2021 (UTC)[reply]

  • ... that Paddy Fox was the British Army's most successful recruiting sergeant? "PADDY FOX, who has died aged 82, was a Chelsea Pensioner and the Army's most successful recruiting sergeant." from: "Paddy Fox, recruiting sergeant - obituary". The Telegraph. 30 March 2016. Retrieved 16 November 2021.

Moved to mainspace by Dumelow (talk). Self-nominated at 08:07, 18 November 2021 (UTC).[reply]

  • ... new enough, log enough, reads well, copy bio <25%, both hooks in article and followed by inline citations to sources verifying them, I prefer ALT1. The proposed hook might be too close in copy of the original. QPQ provided. No image, Hook lengths ok. Thank you again. Whispyhistory (talk) 17:45, 18 November 2021 (UTC)[reply]
ALT1 to T:DYK/P2

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Paddy Fox/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 08:57, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]


I will take this one, comments to follow in the next few days. Zawed (talk) 08:57, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Apologies for the length of time taken to come back to this. Fox is an interesting chap, clearly very industrious and charitable. My comments are as follows:

Lead

  • Seems a little long given overall length of article.
Agreed and trimmed
  • British Army should be added into the infobox.
Added

Early life and career

  • "born at a racing stables": should that be plural given the use of "a"?
It's common in (British?) horseracing to say "a racing stables", I presume it's to emphasise that it's a bigger operation rather than just a shed with horses in it
  • link Belfast, Oxfordshire, British Army, General Officer Commanding, possibly Northumbrian District
All done

Recruiter

  • link Peterlee, County Durham
Done
  • A explanation of what a Long Service Recruiter is probably warranted.
Removed it, the only mention of the term online was in reports on Fox so probably a mistake by the journalist
  • The LG cite should go to page 7392, not 7391.
Oops, fixed
Linked only "bar" to avoid run-on with the medal link
  • "Fox's BEM citation commended him for setting a "splendid example of the Army to the public"": the quoted portion within this section should be cited. I note that the LG cite doesn't say this, I wonder if you are referring to the recommendation for the BEM?
Yes, you are right. The source used "citation statement" which is apparently part of the nomination form, I've amended to clarify.

Retirement

  • If there are articles for them, link St Cuthbert's Church and Lucy Portman
No articles
  • If known, suggest adding place of burial.
Alas, I couldn't find any record if he was buried or cremated

Images

  • These are all appropriately tagged.

That's it for me. Zawed (talk) 09:22, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review Zawed (and no worries about the time taken, we're all busy). I think I've answered everything above.
This all looks good. I am passing this as a GA as I believe that it meets the relevant criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 04:53, 29 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]