Talk:Paddling Out/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 20:35, 19 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing this one for a review. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:35, 19 June 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

Add Universal to labels.

Done

Add CD to formats.

It was not released on CD; a promotional CD is not a commercial release. Pancake (talk) 20:17, 1 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

If it is available for purchase...it is a commercial release (You have it on formats ad track listing). Is that some sort of illegal copy? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 23:12, 2 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

A promo CD single is only sent to radio stations and nightclubs for promotional purposes. They are not commercial releases and often include the disclaimer "Promo only - not for sale". Pancake (talk) 11:41, 3 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Oh one of those promo CD's.

Done. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:18, 3 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

performed → remove

Specify why? "Song performed by" is commonly used in articles. Pancake (talk) 20:17, 1 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Usually performed is used when singers, bands...and so on "perform the song live". This article, due to the songs not being heavily promoted, besides tours and the BBC show, doesn't have a "live performance" section. That's when you would use this wording.

Done

"through Columbia and Downtown." → remove the latter as it was only released by said label on February.

Like with the infobox, the lead usually mention all labels regardless of the date. Pancake (talk) 20:17, 1 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Done Ok, then. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 23:25, 2 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Background

Add additional recording by Nille Perned.

Is it that important? Pancake (talk) 20:17, 1 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

For him it is, if he is part of the process of recording why not adding him? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 23:26, 2 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Done

Link Ted Jason

Done

Composition and lyrics

Fine.

Release and remixes

Prior to its digital release, the Lu Cont remix premiered online on 10 February 2012, and the Gartner remix followed on 27 February → Prior to their digital release, the Lu Cont and the Gartner remix premiered online on 10 and 27 February 2012, respectively. (both sources on the end of the sentence)

Done

Josiah Hughes of Exclaim! viewed Lu Cont's remix as an "exciting fist-pumper", writing that it "quite possibly surpass[es]" the original. MTV's Sam Lansky described Gartner's uptempo take as "aggressive", and noted the addition of handclaps and "grimy" synthesizers, which the writer believed fit well with Wyatt's vocals. A writer for Pigeons & Planes wrote that Gartner "flips the tune with some heavy bass, some heart-wrenching build-ups, and hard-hitting thumps". In March 2013, Sarah Polonsky of Vibe named the it one of the DJ's best remixes" → move this to the critical reception, make the necessary changes to it fits.

This section covers and release and remixes, hence the reception of the remixes belong here. Similary to Irresistible (Jessica Simpson song). Pancake (talk) 20:17, 1 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Accepted.

Done MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 23:29, 2 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Critical reception

music critics → link to music journalism

Done

"brings the best of contemporary beat production to a song that most pop bands could get behind" → use your own words.

Done

Chart performance

Fine.

Music video

"and the director came up with ideas that the band liked." → remove

Done

"Wyatt told Digital Spy that Nilsson's images "go together in a way that feels truthful" to the band's work" → same idea on the next sentence, remove this one.

Not really the same thing. Pancake (talk) 20:17, 1 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

What's the big difference then? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:41, 3 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Revised. Pancake (talk) 18:51, 5 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

""It was kind of filtered through some concepts that we like to talk about in the studio, which at the time was genetic engineering and surveillance and, like, Google gathering all your information and selling it to somebody without you knowing about it or even consenting to it – turning on your camera in your computer, all these questions, which, you know, we're getting close to the Brave New World that Aldous Huxley talks about." → most of this is a repetition of what is said before, I would add what is not in the first paragraph of the article. Despite being a direct quote, it causes a violation on Copyvio director.

Done

"Jean Noel " → second-time only "Noel".

Noel isn't specified as a lastname. Pancake (talk) 20:17, 1 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

What do you mean? Isn't his last name Noel?MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 19:41, 3 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Jean-Noel is a common first name. It is not clear if Noel is a last name here. Pancake (talk) 18:51, 5 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I had no idea, thank you for the information. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:19, 6 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Formats and track listing

Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is space on both sides.

Done

Credits and personnel

Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is space on both sides.

Done

Link Ted Jensen

Done

Charts

Fine

Release history

Fine

References

Wikilink the first time Consequence of Sound appears, remove the wikilink form the second.'

Done

Remove the second wikilink from Exlaim!

Done

External links

Music video link doesn't work and Vevo is gone as well.

Done

Add the lyrics from the official provider, if possible.

Done

Overall

Deserves a mention it was performed on BBC Radio 1 and several times on the tour.

Will look into this in a bit. Pancake (talk) 20:17, 1 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Ping me when you are done, I will take a second look at it.

@MarioSoulTruthFan: done. Pancake (talk) 11:51, 2 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@MarioSoulTruthFan: done again. Pancake (talk) 18:51, 5 July 2018 (UTC)[reply]

This absolutely isn't Victorian fashion, which was quite modern. It's closer to Elizabethan clothing with the ruffled necks. sugarfish (talk) 17:17, 20 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]