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GA Review

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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 01:02, 6 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]


Opening statement

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In every review I conduct, make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use  Done,  Fixed, plus Added,  Not done,  Doing..., or minus Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 01:02, 6 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]

History

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  • Move the link for the Italian disapora from "them" to "Italian Immigrants."
  • its first-floor storefront[3] [...] Greek Revival building[4] MOS:REFPUNCT
  • The existing buildings on the land were cleared, and ground was broken for the new church in 1926. On New Year's Day 1928, during construction, a 3-year-old girl named Zita Triglia was killed when a 10-foot-long beam fell from the belfry scaffolding, knocking her from her father's arms. Irrelevant and not supported by the given source (citation 13). I looked this up on google and the first result was a blog.
* I looked into the blog author, and he wrote a book on this topic in 2015. Is it possible that Our Lady of Pompeii is covered in it? –♠Vami_IV†♠ 07:06, 13 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
Cool beans. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 15:45, 25 October 2018 (UTC)[reply]
@Vami IV: I've finally read through the book. It doesn't talk about Our Lady of Pompeii. However, I've done some more research on the author and he seems to be an established authority on the history of New York City's architecture; see here, here, and here for just a few examples. Given this fact, since the blog was published by an expert on this subject who has been previously published on the same subject by reputable, independent publishers, I think this might be one of the exceptions listed at WP:SELFPUBLISH that would qualify the blog as a usable source. Ergo Sum 02:43, 3 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]
I'm convinced, approved. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 03:07, 3 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Architecture

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  • which will be the decisive weapon in the battle. Does not sound neutral.
  • Above the battle, images of the Pompei, Italy parish, including the campanile of the Shrine of Our Lady of the Rosary of Pompei, are visible. Simplify.
  • Blessed Giovanni Battista Scalabrini as a bishop in white, their founder. Move "their founder" to just after the Blessed's name.
  • Beneath the mural in the apse is another frieze that bears the Latin inscription:[13] Move to form the last sentence of the previous paragraph. It uses the one of two citations before it (13), still pertains to the mural, and is just a single paragraph.
  • It was expanded over the years, including at one point by incorporating pipes from a 1928 organ in the Immaculate Conception Church in Trenton, New Jersey. Remove "including" and "by", as shown.

GA progress

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Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed
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