Talk:Oroblanco/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 23:51, 3 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: Kimikel (talk · contribs) 00:19, 6 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 08:45, 17 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this over the next day ~ Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 08:45, 17 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Wikibreak

@Rollinginhisgrave I'm very appreciative that you decided to review my article. However, the last few days I've been preparing to fly overseas, and I'm flying out today. Would you be willing to wait for a couple weeks after you leave your comments so that I can address them after I return? Thank you. Kimikel (talk) 13:48, 17 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

No worries, I'm sorry I didn't check your userpage before opening the review. I'll take a bit more time with the review if there's less rush, enjoy your trip! Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 13:53, 17 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Finished up. Take your time, whenever you're back have a look. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 06:58, 25 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Rollinginhisgrave I'm very appreciative of the review. I changed the majority of what you suggested (I left two small notes below) and I believe the article is ready to be reexamined whenever you get a chance. Thank you very much for your patience Kimikel (talk) 13:25, 2 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Kimikel all looks good, just pending a quote for source [12] and I can pass. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 03:03, 3 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Rollinginhisgrave I removed that sentence entirely as it erroneously included info about the melogold instead of the oroblanco. Kimikel (talk) 23:47, 3 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry for missing that. Passing now. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 23:50, 3 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose and content

than other varieties of grapefruit this may speak to my ignorance, but why is it a variety of grapefruit and not a variety of pomelo? Or is it both?
The hybrid was first created... this sentence has far too many commas.
where it also failed to find much commercial success. WP:IDIOM; commercially unsuccessful?
is a reduced amount of edible flesh. less?
I have gotten rid of the 2005 study as it was not MEDRS. Some info may be able to be salvaged. I removed the "with health benefits" part of the second study, such claims will need to be backed up with MEDRS.
grapefruit, such as WP:CINS
has been described as doesn't need attribution
In 1982, UCR chancellor Tomás Rivera ceremonially planted an oroblanco tree in front of the university's Citrus Experiment Station to celebrate the station's 75th anniversary.[20] why is this worth mentioning in the history of the oroblanco?
falling from 1,105 acres of oroblancos ~~remaining~~ in 2004
- Done with all of these except for the first; it is definitely also a variety of pomelo but it was made as a "competitor" of sorts to the common grapefruit and as such is heavily compared to other grapefruits varieties in a lot of the literature I've cited so that's why I did that.

Suggestions

It requires less heat for growth → to grow
after growers in Israel began growing the fruit when?
and in spite of its resurgence despite
Consider linking Ten Speed Press
"20 feet (6.1 m)" use one sig fig, as it is giving greater accuracy than you intend
- Done; all I've found for the "when" is some websites claiming 1984 but they don't appear to be usable sources.

Sources

[1a] Y
[1e] Y
[1k] Y
[3a] Y
[3e] Y
[5a] Y
[7a] Y
[7d] Y
[12] Can you give me a quote for this?
[18] Y
[20] Y
[21] Y
[22] Y

Other

No COPYVIO/OR Y 4.8% earwig
Neutral Y
Stable Y
Images appropriately tagged Y (the article would benefit from the image of the cut green oroblanco on Commons)
Broad / summary style Y

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 06:00, 25 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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