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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 08:36, 12 July 2020 (UTC)
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Starting this review today or tomorrow, after I've been on a brief hiatus from them --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:36, 12 July 2020 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Replace hlist with bullet points
- Add the link to music video on YouTube in the infobox
- "for her fourth studio album," → "from her fourth studio album,"
- "It was released for" → "The song was released for"
- Target single to Single (music)
- "The song was written by Marina," → "It was written by Marina,"
- "and produced by Görres." → "while produced by Görres."
- "Several remixes of the single were produced" → "Several remixes of the song were produced"
- "and indie pop track with a" → "and indie pop track, with a"
- Remove wikilink on nature
- Remove wikilink on Greece
- "considered it a standout or" → "considered the song a standout and"
- "it to previous single" → "it to Marina's previous single"
- "a song that also discusses" → "a track that also discusses"
- "while others dismissed" → "while other critics dismissed"
- "music videos were produced for the song. The original video" → "accompanying music videos were produced and the original video" with the appropriate wikilink
- "was released the following month." → "was released in April 2019, featuring..." with some info added
- "in April 2019." → "that same month"
- "It was also included on the setlist to" → "The song was also included on the setlist of"
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Done. Carbrera (talk) 12:34, 15 July 2020 (UTC).
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Background and release
[edit]- "She explained that" → "She explained that,"
- "and there wasn’t" → "and there wasn't"
- "After the announcement, she" → "After the announcement, Marina"
- Target single to Single (music)
- "On 14 February 2019 she announced Love + Fear," → "On 14 February 2019, she announced Love + Fear,"
- "the same day, revealing that "Orange Trees" is" → "that same day, revealing "Orange Trees" as"
- "composed of two segments with" → "that is composed of two segments, with"
- "It was written by Marina," → "The song was written by Marina,"
- "and produced by Görres." → "while Görres handled production."
- Img looks good
- "on 22 March 2019 through Atlantic Records." → "as a single on 22 March 2019 through Atlantic Records."
- "On that same day on" → "On that same day via"
- Remove wikilink on extended play
- "Atlantic Records commissioned several remixes" → "Atlantic commissioned several remixes"
- "was released as a download" → "was released for digital download and streaming"
- Add a ref at the end of the sentence to back this info up
- "followed and were released on 31 May and 7 June," → "followed, being released on 31 May and 7 June 2019,"
- "the last one released on 14 June." → "the last one, released for digital download and streaming on 14 June 2019."
- "was also recorded and included on the track listing for Marina's seventh extended play," → "was recorded and included on the track listing for Marina's seventh EP,"
- Add source for the production credit of the acoustic version
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Done. Carbrera (talk) 16:44, 20 July 2020 (UTC).
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Composition and lyrics
[edit]- "and indie pop song with" → "and indie pop song, with"
- "referred to this beat" → "referred to the beat"
- Target chorus to Refrain
- "when considering its" → "when considering the song's"
- "electro-pop" and considered" → "electro-pop", while he considered"
- "in the chord progressions of" → "in the chord progression of" with the wikilink
- "provided by Hassle who plays the guitar" → "provided by Hassle, who plays the guitar,"
- "Görres who plays keyboards" → "Görres, who plays keyboards"
- "by John Hanes and" → "by John Hanes, while"
- Wikilink Erik Hassle on the first mention in the text box
- "on writing "Orange Trees" with Erik Hassle." → "on writing "Orange Trees" with Hassle."
- "Lyrically, the song uses vivid imagery" → "Lyrically, "Orange Trees" uses vivid imagery" with the wikilink
- "to the beauty of Earth’s" → "to the beauty of Earth's"
- "the island of Lefkada in Greece," → "the city island of Lefkada in Greece,"
- "she said: "[...] it's" → "she said "it's"
- "It’s like my body/biology" → "It's like my body/biology"
- "them to the ones from" → "them to the ones of"
- "Marina opens the song..." this sentence does not have a ref to back it up
- "into the first verse where she describes" → "into the first verse, where she describes:"
- Target bridge to Bridge (music)
- "she sings "Life is beautiful" → "Marina sings, "Life is beautiful"
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Done. Carbrera (talk) 16:50, 20 July 2020 (UTC).
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Critical reception
[edit]- "Murphy also liked the track," → "Lauren Murphy also praised the track,"
- "on the album she felt were" → "on the album that she felt were"
- Wikilink upbeat to itself
- ""It’s achingly lovely and" → ""It's achingly lovely and"
- "was reviewed by several critics and received praise." either add more reviews or remove the "and received praise" claim
- "and called it the EP's sole highlight." → "and called it the sole highlight."
- "The more negative reviews of the song" → "The more negative reviews of "Orange Trees"" to be specific
- "of the song and said that it" → "of the song, saying that it"
- Wikilink Fanta to itself
- Target San Pellegrino to S.Pellegrino
- "but there’s something" → "but there's something"
- "In her review of the parent album," → "In her review of Love + Fear,"
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Done. Carbrera (talk) 17:09, 20 July 2020 (UTC).
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Music videos
[edit]- Wikilink music video to itself
- "with Marina for the video for" → "with Marina on the video for"
- "It was filmed on" → "The visual was filmed on"
- Remove wikilink on Mexico
- "As indicated, it was uploaded to Marina's official" → "Ultimately, it was uploaded to Marina's"
- "The video opens following..." and the following sentences up to "Many of the shots..." do not seem to be backed up by any refs
- "on the beach as they" → "on the beach, as they"
- "in the sand in a one-piece swimsuit" → "in the sand of the beach in a one-piece swimsuit,"
- Remove target on dock
- "the release of the music video, the paid download was available for purchase" → "the YouTube release of the music video, it was made available for download"
- "A contributor to" → "A contributor for"
- "vertical video also directed by Muller was" → "vertical video, also directed by Muller, was"
- "The video was eventually posted on Marina's" → "The video was eventually uploaded to her"
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Done. Carbrera (talk) 02:13, 21 July 2020 (UTC).
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Live performances
[edit]- "of the set list of her" → "of the set list for her" on the img main text
- "becoming her first appearance" → "standing as her first appearance"
- "review of her performance," → "review of the performance,"
- "who reviewed Marina's show in" → "reviewing Marina's show in"
- "to a near vibrato" which" → "to a near vibrato", which"
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Done. Carbrera (talk) 12:34, 15 July 2020 (UTC).
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Track listings and formats
[edit]- Retitle to Track listings
- Use bullet points on each track listing header
- Remove wikilink on Spotify since that is part of the release's title
- Wikilink to Claptone should be on the track name instead of the release's title
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Done. Carbrera (talk) 12:34, 15 July 2020 (UTC).
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Credits and personnel
[edit]- Any specific order here; like is this how it is ordered in the liner notes, or some other reasoning maybe for all I know?
- I arranged them alphabetically by last name. Carbrera (talk) 16:57, 20 July 2020 (UTC).
Release history
[edit]- Format → Format(s)
- Distributor → Label
- Separate Digital download and streaming by using hlist instead, with the targets on first mentions solely
- Add a separate col for the versions and call the first two releases Original; the other ones should have their remix titles added as you would've figured
- Wikilink Spotify to itself
- Wikilink Claptone to himself
- Center all of the refs
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Done. Carbrera (talk) 16:55, 20 July 2020 (UTC).
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References
[edit]- Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
- Copyvio score looks good at 30.6%
- Change Amazon Music to Amazon.com on ref 9 with the target
- Cite different stores for the above with the same layout for respective countries to verify the release was indeed various; do the same for refs 10, 12, 13 and 14, and only wikilink Apple Music on the first mention but add (CA), (US), etc. when appropriate
- Ref 11 is from an unreliable source since directly citing Spotify is wrote against on Wiki; remove or replace
- Add (CA) after Apple Music on ref 22
- Either reword the prose backed up by ref 35 or cite various countries to verify that the release was that; add (VA) after Apple Music either way
- Cite BroadwayWorld as publisher instead for ref 37
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Done. Carbrera (talk) 14:51, 21 July 2020 (UTC).
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Final comments and verdict
[edit]On hold after we are reunited with a review of this from me, good luck in the response! --Kyle Peake (talk) 10:35, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake – thanks for your patience. I completely blanked about finishing up this GAN but I will be able to wrap it within the next two days if that is alright with you. Let me know and thanks, Carbrera (talk) 00:16, 20 July 2020 (UTC).
- Carbrera Yeah it is fine, leave comments for anything that I have asked questions about or you have questions about please. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:53, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake – Hello. I believe I have completed addressing all of your comments. Thanks again for picking up another article. I appreciate it. Let me know if there is anything else I can do. Carbrera (talk) 14:51, 21 July 2020 (UTC).
- Carbrera Nice one man, I'll have a look through tonight and see if this is ready to be passed or still needs some fixes! --Kyle Peake (talk) 15:25, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake – Hello. I believe I have completed addressing all of your comments. Thanks again for picking up another article. I appreciate it. Let me know if there is anything else I can do. Carbrera (talk) 14:51, 21 July 2020 (UTC).
- Carbrera Yeah it is fine, leave comments for anything that I have asked questions about or you have questions about please. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:53, 20 July 2020 (UTC)
- Carbrera Have done some copy editing but you still need to cite various stores for releases as suggested, plus are you sure ref 11 works? --Kyle Peake (talk) 18:59, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake – What about now? I guess I overlooked those citations. And for #11, what is your opinion? I can't find any other source proving the existence of this digital EP other than directly from Spotify. Carbrera (talk) 21:24, 22 July 2020 (UTC).
- Carbrera #11 should work fine I guess, #9 still needs more though. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:11, 23 July 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake – I changed 'Various' to just 'United States'. Carbrera (talk) 01:11, 24 July 2020 (UTC).
- Carbrera That's fine, did some brief copy editing but will now ✓ Pass, congrats on the well-timed response too. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:52, 24 July 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake – I changed 'Various' to just 'United States'. Carbrera (talk) 01:11, 24 July 2020 (UTC).
- Carbrera #11 should work fine I guess, #9 still needs more though. --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:11, 23 July 2020 (UTC)
- Kyle Peake – What about now? I guess I overlooked those citations. And for #11, what is your opinion? I can't find any other source proving the existence of this digital EP other than directly from Spotify. Carbrera (talk) 21:24, 22 July 2020 (UTC).