Talk:Ons Jabeur/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 16:09, 1 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

The first mention of No. should be converted to read as No.
- Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:44, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"She grew up in the bigger nearby coastal town of Sousse." - larger
- Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:28, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"a national sport high school" - not so sure that this is the correct way to spell this out
- Which part? "Lycee sportif" basically translates to "sport high school". Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:28, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

As with the first query in the lead section, the first mention of No. should be converted to read as No.
- Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:29, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Wikilink wild card to [[Wild card (sports)]
- Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:34, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"She was also given a wild card into qualifying at the Dubai Tennis Championships the following week." - the qualifying competition
- I think you forgot to finish this one? Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:34, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - Added. MWright96 (talk) 06:39, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"She entered qualifying at Wimbledon and the US Open," - how about entered the qualifying competitions instead?
- Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:32, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"and did not win any titles in 2015." - and no titles in 2015.
- Changed the sentence a bit to "Her only ITF title in 2014 came at a $25K event in Tunis, and she did not win any titles in 2015." Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:32, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"With this title, she also earned a wildcard" - should that be spelt as wild card to be consistent?
- Yes. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:44, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"She defeated three players including No. 36, Yulia Putintseva" - not mentioned in the WTA Tennis source attached to it
- Added match history as a source. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:24, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"In February 2020, Jabeur continued her progress and reached the second round of the Dubai Tennis Championships, where she lost to Simona Halep, despite having a match point in the third set tiebreak." - none of this is mentioned in the Romania Insider source so another reference that mentions all of this information is needed to replace it
- Replaced source. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:24, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"that also included Mexico, China, and Germany." - the countries mentioned here should be wikilinked to their respective Fed Cup team articles
- Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:49, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Tunisia ultimately did not participate in Fed Cup in 2014 or 2015," - in the Fed Cup
- For some reason, it is standard to leave out the "the" here. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:45, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"which was concurrent with Tunisia's one-year ban from Davis Cup" - from the Davis Cup
- Same as above. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:45, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Jabeur also represented Tunisia in singles at the London Olympic Games in 2012 in London" - the text in bold is redundant since London is already mentioned beforehand
- Removed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 01:44, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Wikilink drop shot and forehands for non-Tennis readers
- Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:35, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"a Russian-Tunisian former fencer who has also served as her fitness coach since 2017." - you can clarify that it was mid-2017 as stated in the GQ Middle East source
- Done. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:48, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Her favorite tennis player as a child was Andy Roddick." - The WTA Tennis source attached to this does state why Roddick is her favorite player if you believe that information would help
- I left it out because it varies a little bit in other sources. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:48, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"She plays football recreationally, and is a fan of Real Madrid CF." - WTA Tennis states that she supports Real Madrid but not that she plays it recreationally
- Added a source. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:48, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"At the tournament, she entered the main draw as a lucky loser and won her first two career Grand Slam main draw matches." - not so sure of the relevance of this information in the personal life section. It could be better to remove it since it is mentioned in the 2017-18 sub-section
- I abbreviated it to only include the last part. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:48, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 15 should include the Associated Press as the agency who provided the story and it should include the subscription parameter
- Added. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:21, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
References 31, 35 are missing the dates they were published
- Added. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:21, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"'I felt like I was home!' – Peterson fights back to beat Jabeur and make Tianjin final" - the hyphen should be replaced by an en dash
- Fixed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:21, 3 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Overall the main issues concern some of the wording of the prose and material not supported by some sources. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 20:48, 2 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]