Talk:Onion/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ColonelHenry (talk · contribs) 01:45, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

Looking forward to reviewing this article. --ColonelHenry (talk) 01:45, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

Quite a large article, so thank you for taking it on. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 08:19, 1 September 2013 (UTC)

Initial comments

This is a very ambitious article and that poses difficulty in terms of weighing WP:SUMMARY with the comprehensiveness that ought to be present in the interests of breadth of coverage (the balance of criteria 3). I do see with a little more expansion and copyediting, this would be a great FAC candidate and likely a good candidate to be added at Vital Articles (if it isn't there already...note to self, must check). I do have a few advisory comments that I will be adding to:--ColonelHenry (talk) 22:00, 12 September 2013 (UTC)

• There are several sections that are one or two sentences in the Varieties section. Moving forward per the MOS, either they have to be expanded into stand alone sections or combined.

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:05, 14 September 2013 (UTC)

• • The introduction of a list in the European onions section doesn't seem appropriate. Why are they protected? why are they significant? what protections are afforded them?

Removed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:05, 14 September 2013 (UTC)

• There needs to be more information in the production and trade section.
• In cultivation, I think there needs to be more discussion on soil conditions. For instance, according to the USDA-NRCS the two most productive onion areas (in terms of per-acre yields) in world are dense, deeply organic soils near Valdosta, Georgia, and the Black Dirt Region shared between Sussex County, New Jersey and Orange County, New York (the former "Drowned Lands of the Wallkill River"). Neither of them can be describe as "best cultivated in light to medium soils that are well-drained and have had well-rotted manure or compost dug in the previous year"

Enlarged and improved. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:05, 14 September 2013 (UTC)

• These assertions need a citation supporting them: (from Historical use)
  • spherical shape and concentric rings symbolized eternal life. Onions were even used in Egyptian burials, as evidenced by onion traces being found in the eye sockets of Ramesses IV.
  • sentences in the next paragraph regarding ancient greek and roman use. If this is footnote 14, just repeat the citations.

Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:05, 14 September 2013 (UTC)

...more to come.--ColonelHenry (talk) 22:00, 12 September 2013 (UTC)

Review

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose is clear and concise, without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:

   I do not see any spelling or grammatical problems, the prose is clear and concise, no evidence or indication of copyvios.

   B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

   Complied with MOS guidelines. I do not see any problems with the five specific MOS sections required by 1b.

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. Has an appropriate reference section:

   complies with layout style guideline for references, contains appropriate reference sections

   B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

   complies with inline citations and reliable sources guidelines

   C. No original research:

   no evidence or indication of original research

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   addresses all aspects with adequate breadth.

   B. Focused:

   excellent job balancing relevant details within the guidelines of summary style

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

   No issues regarding neutrality vs. bias/POV

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

   There is protection on the article dating from June, however, this was because of petty vandalism from anonymous IPs, not because of edit-warring or content disputes.

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   All images appear to be properly tagged. On an lightly related note, I love the mixed onions image in the lede. Excellent photograph.

   B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

   Images relevant to article subject and content, Captions sufficient.

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

   Thank you for tackling such a large, ambitious work on a subject most of take for granted.