Talk:One Times Square/GA1

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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 19:54, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I will get to this soon. — ΛΧΣ²¹ 19:55, 17 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

History

"(The paper has since moved to The New York Times Building on nearby Eighth Avenue.)" Try to mix this into the prose; as it is, it looks awkward.
"At first it displayed major news headlines.." A comma after "first" is missing
"(announcing such major events as the surrender of Japan and the assassination of John F. Kennedy)" I believe that this is useless here.
"Newsday declined" Newsday was italicized previously, but not here.
"and also upgraded it to use more modern" the "also" here is not needed
"However, Dow Jones and Company stepped in to save the ticker," when? the same year? a year later?
"The Times sold the building to advertising executive and sign designer Douglas Leigh in 1961." At the end of the previous paragraph, you jump to 1963 and then to 1994. Then, here, you go back to 1961; if those are different ideas, it is okay, but I believe you should keep a timeline and not be jumping back and forth in time.
"Leigh then sold the building to Allied Chemical in 1963." You stated above that it was sold to Allied Chemical and it is implicit that it was The Times. Now this states that the Times sold it to Douglas Leigh and he then sold it to Allied Chemical. Try to make this clear in the previous paragraph and merge this info so that you don't repeat it.

I've revised all of the relevant portions here. ViperSnake151 Talk 06:46, 20 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I will continue the review this weekend. Sorry for taking a bit long, RL issues keep me busy in weekdays. — ΛΧΣ²¹ 20:26, 24 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Comment In terms of coverage, would be great to have one paragraph in the article providing slightly more info about the architecture, such as the width of the Times Square facing facade, internal layout, vertical circulation, etc --ELEKHH^T 06:44, 24 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

From building to billboard

"Lehman Brothers sold One Times Square again" This means that the Lehman Brothers sold the building more than once, which seems to be incorrect.
"In filings surrounding the sale of the tower to Jamestown" I think that related is a better word than surrounding here
"(with a yearly average of over 100 million pedestrians—alongside its prominence in media coverage of New Year's festivities, which organizers estimate at being around 1 billion)" This claim needs a citation after the ")"
"Despite advertising becoming its primary use" --> "Despite being primarily used for advertising" to avoid tense issues.
"has still housed" still is unnecessary
"the area was home" what does "the area" mean here? the same three floors WB used?

— ΛΧΣ²¹ 14:47, 28 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Did some adjustments. That entire sentence containing the "with a yearly average of over 100 million pedestrians—alongside its prominence in media coverage of New Year's festivities, which organizers estimate at being around 1 billion)" is also sourced by the WSJ article. ViperSnake151 Talk 04:03, 29 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hmm. I think I am ready to pass now. I'd recommend taking the article to peer review if you plan to take this to FAC. Regards. — ΛΧΣ²¹ 20:10, 7 February 2013 (UTC)[reply]