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GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:31, 5 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

This article is nearly two months old, making a review wholeheartedly due! --K. Peake 07:31, 5 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
  • List as Elof Loelv under producer(s) since this is not a track listing
  • "who produced the track." → "who handled the production." and this should be the second sentence of the lead instead
  • Add a sentence inbetween credits and release here mentioning that the song was one of the first written for the album and when the singer previewed it
  • ""On the Low" is a downtempo" → "it is a downtempo"
  • Pipe minimal to Minimal music
  • "the single appeared below" → "the song appeared below"
  • "chart at number twelve on" → "chart, reaching number 12 on" per MOS:NUM
  • Wikilink lyric video to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • "on Nyhetsmorgon and a session" → "on Nyhetsmorgon in 2018 and a 2020 session"
  • Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
Done. Let me know if the added sentence works or not. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
That is a proper addition to the lead, though I copyedited the preview part to avoid overusage of it. --K. Peake 06:43, 8 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Background

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  • Remove comma after third studio album
  • "for the album,[2] and" → "for the album and" moving [2] solely to the end of the sentence
  • The two tracks being the only ones written by her and Loelv is not sourced
  • "said that the two spent long days" → "said that the two spent heavy time" per the source
  • Pipe minimal to Minimal music
  • "out of all tracks" → "out of all the tracks"
  • Pipe chorus to Refrain
  • "when it came to melody." → "in terms of melody."
  • "she labelled it" → "she labelled the track"
Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Composition and lyrics

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  • Wikilink falsetto on the audio sample text
  • "minimal and detailed production backed" → "minimal and detailed production, backed" on the audio sample, with the pipe
  • Pipe bird calls to Bird vocalization
  • Pipe drums to Drum kit
  • Remove comma after percussion
  • Remove speech marks for minimalistic since this is an encyclopedic term
  • "and NME writer Hannah Mylrea characterized" → "whereas NME writer Hannah Mylrea characterized
  • "in lines such as" → "in lines such as,"
  • "the closing bird calls "transform Styrke's" → "the closing bird calls transform "Styrke's" per the source's wording
Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Release and promotion

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  • The skateboard being over a yellow background is not sourced
  • Wikilink lyric video to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
  • The source mentions her performing the song in a small room and no bottom part is sourced for the lyrics
  • "Lisa Hultengren directed the video with" → "Lisa Hultengren directed the video, with"
  • Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
  • "She learnt how to" → "Styrke learnt how to"
Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

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  • "gave it a "Song of the Day" designation while writing," → "gave the track a "Song of the Day" designation, writing,"
  • Mention how Mylrea highlighted the vocals in the NME review
  • Start a new sentence at the Simon Österhof review because the NME one will be long enough on its own once expanded
  • "found it "irresistible"" → "found the song "irresistible""
  • "whispering working well" → "whispering work[s] well" in this context, as otherwise it does not read correctly
  • "He wrote, "The careful" → "He wrote that "the careful"
  • "more to discover."" → "more to discover"." per MOS:QUOTE (this is not a full sentence as the source shows)
  • "the song suffered from" → "the song suffers from"
  • "below the top 100 at number twelve on" → "at number 12 on" per MOS:NUM (previous part removal because it has already been stated)
Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Credits and personnel

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  • Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel.
Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Are you sure programming is listed before synthesizer under credits; I can't check since I don't have an account?
Changed up the order. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Charts

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  • Good

References

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  • Copyvio score looks great at 24.8%!!!!
  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
I'm fairly inactive on Wiki these days. What tool is this? Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
  • Add the language parameter to refs 11 and 16
  • Cite BroadwayWorld as publisher instead on ref 29
Done! Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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Thanks for a thorough review, Kyle! Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
 Pass now, very good job and I would have checked through this sooner if you'd have given me a ping! --K. Peake 06:43, 8 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]