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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:31, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
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This article is nearly two months old, making a review wholeheartedly due! --K. Peake 07:31, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
[edit]- Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
- List as Elof Loelv under producer(s) since this is not a track listing
- "who produced the track." → "who handled the production." and this should be the second sentence of the lead instead
- Add a sentence inbetween credits and release here mentioning that the song was one of the first written for the album and when the singer previewed it
- ""On the Low" is a downtempo" → "it is a downtempo"
- Pipe minimal to Minimal music
- "the single appeared below" → "the song appeared below"
- "chart at number twelve on" → "chart, reaching number 12 on" per MOS:NUM
- Wikilink lyric video to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
- "on Nyhetsmorgon and a session" → "on Nyhetsmorgon in 2018 and a 2020 session"
- Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
- Done. Let me know if the added sentence works or not. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
- That is a proper addition to the lead, though I copyedited the preview part to avoid overusage of it. --K. Peake 06:43, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
Background
[edit]- Remove comma after third studio album
- "for the album,[2] and" → "for the album and" moving [2] solely to the end of the sentence
- The two tracks being the only ones written by her and Loelv is not sourced
- "said that the two spent long days" → "said that the two spent heavy time" per the source
- Pipe minimal to Minimal music
- "out of all tracks" → "out of all the tracks"
- Pipe chorus to Refrain
- "when it came to melody." → "in terms of melody."
- "she labelled it" → "she labelled the track"
- Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
Composition and lyrics
[edit]- Wikilink falsetto on the audio sample text
- "minimal and detailed production backed" → "minimal and detailed production, backed" on the audio sample, with the pipe
- Pipe bird calls to Bird vocalization
- Pipe drums to Drum kit
- Remove comma after percussion
- Remove speech marks for minimalistic since this is an encyclopedic term
- "and NME writer Hannah Mylrea characterized" → "whereas NME writer Hannah Mylrea characterized
- "in lines such as" → "in lines such as,"
- "the closing bird calls "transform Styrke's" → "the closing bird calls transform "Styrke's" per the source's wording
- Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
Release and promotion
[edit]- The skateboard being over a yellow background is not sourced
- Wikilink lyric video to itself per MOS:LINK2SECT
- The source mentions her performing the song in a small room and no bottom part is sourced for the lyrics
- "Lisa Hultengren directed the video with" → "Lisa Hultengren directed the video, with"
- Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
- "She learnt how to" → "Styrke learnt how to"
- Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
Reception
[edit]- "gave it a "Song of the Day" designation while writing," → "gave the track a "Song of the Day" designation, writing,"
- Mention how Mylrea highlighted the vocals in the NME review
- Start a new sentence at the Simon Österhof review because the NME one will be long enough on its own once expanded
- "found it "irresistible"" → "found the song "irresistible""
- "whispering working well" → "whispering work[s] well" in this context, as otherwise it does not read correctly
- "He wrote, "The careful" → "He wrote that "the careful"
- "more to discover."" → "more to discover"." per MOS:QUOTE (this is not a full sentence as the source shows)
- "the song suffered from" → "the song suffers from"
- "below the top 100 at number twelve on" → "at number 12 on" per MOS:NUM (previous part removal because it has already been stated)
- Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
Credits and personnel
[edit]- Use
{{spaced ndash}}
so there is the right space between credits and personnel.
- Done. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
- Are you sure programming is listed before synthesizer under credits; I can't check since I don't have an account?
- Changed up the order. Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
Charts
[edit]- Good
References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks great at 24.8%!!!!
- Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
- I'm fairly inactive on Wiki these days. What tool is this? Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
- Add the language parameter to refs 11 and 16
- Cite BroadwayWorld as publisher instead on ref 29
- Done! Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
External links
[edit]- Good
Final comments and verdict
[edit]On hold until all of the issues are fixed and in all honesty, that went quick because this is a quality article; congrats! --K. Peake 09:13, 5 April 2022 (UTC)
- Thanks for a thorough review, Kyle! Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass now, very good job and I would have checked through this sooner if you'd have given me a ping! --K. Peake 06:43, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
- Thanks for a thorough review, Kyle! Pancake (talk) 15:23, 6 April 2022 (UTC)