Talk:ON TV (TV network)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 20:09, 11 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 20:09, 11 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Infobox looks good.
Add a comma after "sporting events".

History

"majority owned" → "majority-owned"
Add commas after "January 31, 1982", "Detroit, Cincinnati", and "Los Angeles, Chicago".
"under construction" → "under-construction"
"shuttered March" → "shuttered on March"
"keep services" → "keeping services"
"southern California" → "Southern California"

Service and programming

Add a comma after "Los Angeles, Phoenix".
The phrase "did not pay simply received no" sounds wordy, so try rewording.

Equipment

"manufactuers" → "manufacturers"
"California governor" → "California Governor"
Remove the comma after "particularly Chartwell in Detroit".

Stations

Add commas after "Lakers", "September 9, 1979", "minor league baseball", "Blackhawks", and "children's programs".
"operating January" → "operating on January"
"court ordered" → "court-ordered"

This is the only one I didn't change, as it is a subject and verb, not an adjective ("a court ordered Desmond to..."). I'm not a personal Oxford comma fan, but I went ahead and made the changes.

References

Try archiving sources (especially Newspapers.com, which will disappear if the title changes).

Thanks for the review. Let me get back to this particular element... I hope there's a tool, because this and KVDO-TV combined have a lot of references to newspapers.com, and also I have a LOT of citations to newspapers.com in my GAs, GA candidates and across the topic area. (To give you an idea of the scale, I have nearly 11,000 clippings on newspapers.com!) Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 00:20, 13 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Sammi Brie: Thanks for archiving sources, but there are some, may I several edits above that weren't addressed. Same issue with the KVDO-TV article, where there are just a few issues that haven't been addressed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:27, 13 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Some Dude From North Carolina: Eyes glazed over a bit there, but I should have everything taken care of. The only other one besides "Telecasters" I haven't made on KVDO is "prime time", as our article on that is two words and I'm not using it as an adjective but as a noun (e.g. AP Stylebook would call for "prime time" as noun and "prime-time" as an adjective). Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 01:52, 13 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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