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Reviewer: Jivesh boodhun (talk · contribs) 08:28, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Before beginning the review, i will like to tell you that you can feel free to disagree where you think i am wrong. The we, will discuss. Best of luck. And the article looks good at first sight. Now, let me dig into it. Lol. Jivesh • Talk2Me 08:35, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox[edit]

  • No mention of recording location(s)

Do you mean the recording studios or just the locations (i.e. New York City) done Crystal Clear x3 15:30, 6 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

  • Teen pop is a subgenre of pop music and as far as i see teen pop is sourced so don't you think removing pop from genres will be fine?

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Comment: The rest is great. Jivesh • Talk2Me 08:35, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Lead[edit]

  • Teenage Dream, >>> Teenage Dream (2011),

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  • while production and additional writing was done >>> shouldn't this be were?

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  • The pop ballad >>> Hmmm, you need to decide now whether you will use pop or teen pop

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  • ballad? Is it sourced somewhere below?

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  • Link [[Ballad (music)|ballad]] if the above answer is yes. If no, change to song. It is obvious NLITM is a ballad, nevertheless, Wikipedia wants a sources from most details.

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  • The pop ballad speaks >>> is lyrically

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  • doesn't >>> Avoid this form >>> does not

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  • first started dating her husband>>> Hmmm, change it to first started dating her now-'husband

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  • with some calling it a powerful and lovely song, as well a contemplative ballad, but noticing the song's lyrics refers "very little" to Perry's husband, Russell Brand. >>> some of whom called............ but noticed that ......... make only minimal reference to....

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  • at number fifty-three on Billboard Hot 100 >>> at number 53 on US Billboard Hot 100 chart

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  • California Dreams Tour >>> California Dreams Tour (2011)

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Comment: You may have a look at WP:NUMBERS Jivesh • Talk2Me 08:50, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the link!

Background[edit]

  • Do you know which month, year the interview took place?

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  • Hello Katy Tour >>> Hello Katy Tour (2009)

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  • Production and additional writing to song was >>> Shouldn't it be were?

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  • She considers >>> Better use Perry here

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  • after they began dating??? Or after their marriage. I am not sure what you wanted to say here. Can you clarify please?

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  • track >>> To tell you frankly, i was told in the past to avoid using this word. But i am not sure if it can remain in GAs.

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  • which was claiming to know something that you do not really know. >>> Will you be able to do a better wording here? If no tell me, i shall ask someone to do it for you. Feel free to ask if needed.

I replaced "really" with "actually" if that helps...c/e is not my strong suit, and thanks for the offer!

I think it reads better now. Jivesh • Talk2Me 05:23, 7 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Comment: Do you feel background is the appropriate word for the section? What about development or conception? Jivesh • Talk2Me 08:58, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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Composition[edit]

  • Perry vocal range >>> Perry's vocal range

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  • does not feels >>> does not feel

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  • as one reviewer put it >>> Mention the name of the reviewer and the online site or magazine for which he/she writes.

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  • Chris Ryan from MTV Networks >>> MTV News

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  • During the chorus >>> add a comma after chorus and link the latter [[Refrain|chorus]]

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  • Perry sings about holding out for a love that it "cinematic and dramatic/With the perfect ending"[6] and later asks if she is a "stupid girl".[7] >>> you need to mention who sated those things.

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Have a look at this. done

  • PopMatters staff writer Steve Leftridge considered the track to have a "ho-hum" melody.' should be before this Its melody was compared to Britney Spears' "Everytime" (2003) and Evanescence's "My Immortal" (2003).

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  • Another reviewer >>> Again, you need to mention the name, magazine, etc

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  • considering it >>> considering "Not Like the Movies"

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  • The song has a basic sequence of A♭5–Fm7–Cm–E♭ as its chord progression. should be after Perry vocal range spans over an octave, from F♯3 to E♭5.

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  • Music sample >>> You forgot to place a full stop.

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Comment: This has been beautifully written. I love it. Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:08, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Reception[edit]

  • a contemplative ballad" >>> Finally there is one. In the composition section, replace he word song in he beginning with ballad and link it.
  • of the USA Today publication >>> of USA Today (only)

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  • and recommend readers to purchase the track >>> recommended and remember what i said about the word track?

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  • and showcases >>> and that it showcases

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  • They concluded >>> They???

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  • Digital download (dab link) should be linked as [[Music download|digital downloads]]

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  • On the week of August 11, 2010, >>> For the week ending August 11, 2010,

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  • at number fifty-three on the Billboard Hot 100 >>> See comments on lead about numbers etc.

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  • track

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  • from the digital download sales of about 57,000 >>> selling 57,000 digital downloads

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Comment: You need the understand the song charted on the hot 100 chart after having debuted on the Digital Songs chart. So, please re-arrange the paragraph. Let me know if you need help. Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:23, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances[edit]

  • track

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  • You have to decide whether you will use present tense or past tense.

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  • The song was also performed during the live 53rd Grammy Awards. >>> The song was also performed live during the 53rd Grammy Awards.

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  • she sat >>> Perry sat

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  • as she sang the lyrics >>> remove the lyrics (It feels repetitive)

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  • This was the first time that footage had ever been seen. >>> This was the first time that footage was shown.

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  • Valentine's Day–themed performance coupled with Perry's wedding footage made-up for the swing that "looked like a high school–yearbook photo backdrop". >>> Everything should be between quotes. Link Valentine's Day if a link exists on Wikipedia. I am almost sue there will be one.

done for Vday, not sure what you mean by 'between quotes'

I am doing it for you. Jivesh • Talk2Me 05:24, 7 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
  • a similar grade??? Not similar

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Comment: I love that picture. Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:35, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Track listing[edit]

Charts[edit]

References[edit]

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  • Ref number 5 should be only MTV not MTV Networks

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  • Inconsistency in format of dates, example, 08-05-2010. Either use the latter form everywhere or write dates in full everywhere.

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  • Ref number 15 should be MTV News and not just MTV

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Comment: Good. Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:43, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

General Comments[edit]

  • Maybe you could placed a picture of Russell Brand somewhere in the article.

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:56, 5 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for all of your comments and suggestions Crystal Clear x3 14:24, 6 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
You are most welcome. I enjoyed reviewing it because i enjoy Mrs Brand's music. Lol. Feel free to ask me for help whenever needed. And i really appreciate the hard work you did and the time you invested in bettering this page. Katy Perry's songs and album, etc need attention. Not everyone has 5 number-one singles from the same album. With that being said, i hope you continue on this path. Best of luck. Jivesh • Talk2Me 05:28, 7 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
P.S I have passed the article. Congratulations on your first Katy Perry GA. Jivesh • Talk2Me 05:31, 7 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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