Talk:No Exit (Miami Vice)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 01:03, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

Infobox

• Add "running time" to the infobox

  Done. GRAPPLE X 22:38, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

Lede

• NBC → the National Broadcasting Company (NBC) per MOS:ACRO
• For the second paragraph, how about add: "The show centers on ..." followed by "In this episode, ..."

  Done both. GRAPPLE X 22:38, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

Plot

• FBI should be Federal Bureau of Investigation (FBI) per MOS:ACRO

  Removed the pipe, left as full name. GRAPPLE X 22:38, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

• Add actor for "Tony Amato"
• Add actor for "Rita Amato"

  These were both already present. GRAPPLE X 22:38, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

Production

• Paragraphs shouldn't have images on the left for the very first. Move image to right size per MOS:IMAGELOCATION

  Moved to right. GRAPPLE X 22:38, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

• NBC → the National Broadcasting Company (NBC) per MOS:ACRO

  Done above. GRAPPLE X 22:38, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

Reception

• Why is "first broadcast" being used in one, and "premiered" in the lead? Choose only one please.

  Two terms meaning the same thing are used to keep the prose varied and not sounding repetitive, it'd be worse to change to repetitive phrases. GRAPPLE X 22:38, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

• Unlink NBC; it has already been linked once

  Done. GRAPPLE X 22:38, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

• Don't think every repeat/airing needs to be listed. Only the original airing for countries

  Left it in, it's not really undue given how little broadcast information can be found and sourced. GRAPPLE X 22:38, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

• Link Miami Vice

  Linked on first post-lead mention. GRAPPLE X 22:38, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

References

• Ref. 1 is missing publisher (The Onion)
• Ref. 10 has WP:DASH issues
• Allrovi is missing publisher (Rovi)
• Ref. 13 is missing publisher (Internet Brands)

  Fixed all; though Rovi is a Welsh magician. GRAPPLE X 22:38, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

External links

• Add "television" portal to the side
• Add TV.com episode link
• Categories should be in alphabetical order

  Done. GRAPPLE X 22:38, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

Great work. On hold for now. TBrandley 20:52, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, everything's either been addressed or corrected. GRAPPLE X 22:38, 8 August 2012 (UTC)

I'll pass the article. Congrats! TBrandley 23:41, 8 August 2012 (UTC)