Talk:Nikolai Ryzhkov/GA1
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Reviewer: Wizardman Operation Big Bear 14:17, 10 June 2011 (UTC)
It's been on the oldest noms long enough, so I'll give this a review. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 14:17, 10 June 2011 (UTC)
Here are the issues I found:
- Anything on the first 30 years of his life? My guess is not or else it would already be in here, but double-checking.
- "Ryzhkov was born on 28 September 1929 in Dzerzhynsk, Ukrainian Soviet Socialist Republic, Soviet Union, graduating from the Kirov Ural Polytechnic Institute in 1959." sentence may be better off split
"30 kilometres (19 mi) radius" kilometre- "Furthermore, many of the city's Soviet era buildings had not been designed with adequate earthquake protection making their reconstruction more difficult." comma after protection
- "This would later come into effect and give workers' an" remove apostrophe
- "to the 500 Days Programme, which espoused a quick transition to a market economy (see the Fall from power section below)." self-references discouraged, remove it.
"The establishment of the post of President of the Soviet Union by Gorbachev in 1990 weakened the power of the government apparatus, this was" semicolon instead of comma- "According to Swedish economist Anders Åslund, Ryzhkov differed little from Gorbachev when it came to price reform." a source should be added, ideally one from Aslund.
"As noted in historian Jerry F. Hough's book, Democratization and Revolution in the USSR, 1985–1991, Ryzhov supported" can just be condensed to 'Hough noted..' since the ref clearly goes to that book.
I'll put the article on hold and will pass when the issues are fixed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 03:21, 14 June 2011 (UTC)
- Most of the issues above are fixed, just waiting on a couple more. Will remain on hold for a week. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 02:37, 16 June 2011 (UTC)
I fixed the final couple issues myself, so I'll pass this article. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 18:38, 22 June 2011 (UTC)