Talk:Nick Schmaltz/GA1

GA Review

Unsuccessful. Z1720 (talk) 16:56, 4 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Reviewer: Z1720 (talk · contribs) 23:35, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I will begin reviewing this article shortly. Please ping me if you have any questions. Z1720 (talk) 23:35, 11 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
Is it verifiable with no original research?
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:

C. It contains no original research:

D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
Is it neutral?
It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
Is it stable?
It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail:

Comments:

Prose

" He played four seasons of organized hockey, meanwhile, " I don't think meanwhile is necessary here, and can be deleted.
"Several members of the Blackhawks'" I think this should be Blackhawks's, per MOS:'S
"finishing 19 points behind the Colorado Avalanche in the race for the second Western Conference wild card spot," I'm not sure this is necessary in this bio article, and I think it can be removed as off-topic
"By the time that the 2019–20 NHL season" -> "When the 2019–20 NHL season..."
"After receiving a hit to the head during an exhibition game against the Vegas Golden Knights,[56] however, Schmaltz missed the entirety of the Coyotes' postseason run," -> "In an exhibition game against the Vegas Golden Knights, he received a hit to the head and missed the entirety of the Coyotes' postseason run" to tighten up the prose
"record for the most in the Challenge," what does this mean? What is referred to with "Challenge"?
The "Personal life" does not really talk about Schmaltz's personal life, but rather talks about his family's accomplishments. I'm not sure this section is needed. Is there any information on his relationship status, philanthropy work, or what he does during the off season?

Sources

No concerns with source formatting.
No concerns with the reliability of sources
No concerns with plagiarism - earwig check

Source check

Version reviewed: [1]
Sources checked: 1, 5, 16, 26, 54, 60, 77, 83
No concerns in the source check

Images

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I am going to put this on hold until the prose concerns are resolved. Please ping me when ready. Z1720 (talk) 01:13, 12 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

A follow-up ping last week did not yield a response, so I am going to close this GAN. Once the above are addressed the nominator can re-nominate this article. Feel free to ping me when it is nominated again. Z1720 (talk) 16:55, 4 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.