Talk:New Kid/GA1

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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 20:58, 17 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I intend to review this over the week to come. Please ping me I forget after that time-frame (ish). Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 20:58, 17 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

On a search, I have access to a 226-word review in the Bulletin of the Center for Children's Books (doi:10.1353/bcc.2019.0011) that you don't seem to have cited. Do you have access? Is it worth including? Would you like me to send a copy over? Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 21:03, 17 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
- Added. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 18:49, 18 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
A search in the usual places found nothing else not included. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 21:05, 17 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
The image has a proper FUR. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 17:06, 24 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Earwigs indicates no copyvio Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 17:06, 24 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]
... except for three clear mirrors (one of which attributes Wikipedia) Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 17:07, 24 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thoughts on prose, will mostly just ce as I see fit:

I think it might be worth mentioning sooner in the lede that Banks is Black as that seems a pretty integral part of the story

not knowing what to do when a friend from the neighborhood sees him with Liam I'm not clear how this is a difficulty?

I made a small tweak which might not be sufficient. It's essentially because he was afraid of being judged for changing/having white friends. Barkeep49 (talk) 19:28, 24 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

No because that would be OR. But I did make clear this is Craft's opinion about himself.

Thoughts on sourcing

All sources are reliable for what they're being used for. I've checked the majority of sources for what they support
"who even white girls from other countries would identify with" I don't think this is exactly what the source is trying to say (also, a white girl from Iowa does not live in a different country from DC). The idea is that he wanted to create a character with universal appeal, but saying that "even white girls from other countries" kinda makes it seem like Craft was trying to get white girls specifically to identify with the character

I'm not seeing that he has two sons in the source-- it seems to just specify "sons", though I may be missing something,

He says "The three of us joke around a lot." in the context of talking about his sons. Barkeep49 (talk) 19:28, 24 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Can the PW review substantiate the publication date, given that it was written before the book came out?

Yes. Publishing dates don't tend to get changed and as a reliable source PW issues corrections for such things. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 19:28, 24 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Generally nicely done. Please have a glance at my ce and check that all changes are agreeable to you. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 17:29, 24 February 2021 (UTC)[reply]