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;the older Garver had once experienced success as an amateur pitcher – what is this trying to say?
Garver was sent to the San Antonio Missions, another Double-A team in the St. Louis Browns organization, in 1946 and he – put in 1946 at the beginning of the sentence (don't forget to put a comma after 1946 when you do) and a comma before and
following that with five scoreless innings but taking the loss in a 3–1 defeat – comma before but
"but" actually doesn't take a comma here because it does not start a clause that could be independent. If it were, "following that with five scoreless innings but he took the loss in a 3-1 defeat," then a comma would be needed. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 23:12, 4 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Well that was an obvious duh. Don't know why I said that
and he was one two pitchers in the 20th century – add the word of after one
The Opening Day starter for the Athletics in 1958, Garver held the Indians to seven – As should be before the
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The copyvio detector picks up a 48.5% violation possibility from the SABR ref, but it looks good to me as the stuff you copied from there you put in quotes. The other percentage come from random stuff like "with two outs in"
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, even though the Browns only won 52 games total that season – this sounds life puffery when saying even though and only
, an injury that would forever alter the way he would pitch – this doesn't sound neutral. Maybe just say altering the way he would pitch
I don't understand how this is not neutral. The sources say that because of the injury, Garver could not pitch the same way he had before it. Forever is not a term that expresses positivity or negativity about the result. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 23:21, 4 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
True. I'm just being super picky.
Nervous, he allowed three runs in the first inning, – remove Nervous it doesn't sound like formal tone
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