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Did you know nomination

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The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.

The result was: promoted by Rjjiii talk 18:56, 10 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Moved to mainspace by Pahunkat (talk). Number of QPQs required: 0. Nominator has less than 5 past nominations.

Pahunkat (talk) 19:10, 28 May 2024 (UTC).[reply]

General: Article is new enough and long enough
Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
QPQ: Done.
Overall: Meets the necessary quality criteria and the ALT0 hook in particular jumped out as being interesting. AGF on the offline source. SounderBruce 07:09, 6 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Noting for the record hook was changed, see here. Pahunkat (talk) 00:11, 20 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

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Passed. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 15:12, 1 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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Nominator: Pahunkat (talk · contribs) 03:07, 29 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Rollinginhisgrave (talk · contribs) 18:33, 30 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article. Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 18:33, 30 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

General comments

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Reading over, a nice, clean article. Should make for an easy review.

Prose and content

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  • proximity to London, good access to railway lines and location in an area with minimal pollution. location in an area with, "good access to railway lines" -> railway access
     Done
  • limiting his influence in the design why is this an important point to make?
     Done removed
  • Furthermore, it allowed for the installation of a large quantity of windows on the outside walls[1] that led to heat and light problems during the building's tenure. flips in tone: opportunity/threat
     Done fixed
  • Operations were powered with electricity from the national grid redundant that source was the national grid.
     Done
  • Grain stored in the silos was transported through the factory using vertical elevators. stored in the silos redundant
     Done
  • It was washed and passed through a pressure cooker under gravity Could you elaborate on the role of gravity?
     Done Removed the gravity bit - butterfield is the only source I could find that goes into detail about the processes used in the factory, and doesn't elaborate
  • finally baked in ovens to produce the final product to produce the final product redundant
     Done
  • This was achieved through the inclusion of whitewashed concrete and ceramic tiles in the exterior design the tiles were done for marketing?
  • Tourists visiting it would purchase tickets to Welwyn Garden from King's Cross station in London why is this important to mention?
     Done removed
  • The factory was an important local employer during the factory's tenure during the factory's tenure redundant
     Done
  • The factory was an important local employer during the factory's tenure, with many locals working in or knowing people employed by the factory.[1][2][3] The factory was lot of repetition of "the factory"
     Done
  • with 370 jobs lost in the move more concise, i.e. "costing 370 jobs etc.
     Done
  • The factory is considered to be a local landmark,[1][2] and was the entry for 1926 in the Twentieth Century Society's book 100 Buildings 100 Years.[3] Parts of it were granted Grade II heritage status by Historic England on 16 January 1981.[4] suggestion: move this to "The Wheat" paragraph in #Cultural History.
     Done moved

Sources

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It's not necessary for GA, but I would strongly recommend creating a section for sources, and referring to it with Template:sfn (Shortened footnote). It's a bit silly for six of the sources to be duplicated, but changing one page number. You can see it in play in an example page.

Suggestion: link the internet archive copy of The European cities and technology reader : industrial to post-industrial city in the references for accessibility.

Spot Review

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1) "The factory was designed by de Soissons between March–July 1924" Green tickY
2) "at the cost of workers' recreational space" Green tickY
3) "In 1960, the packing and quality control process was automated by machinery, reducing the number of workers involved in the packing process from sixteen to six.": I'll review soon Green tickY
4) "Visitors were invited to view the factory in further support of marketing on its cleanliness" Green tickY
5) "Demolition of the newer 1930s silos took place on 17 January 2018 in preparation for future construction work" Green tickY

Other stuff

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  • No OR, COPYVIO
  • Stable, neutral
  • Images: Red XN: The Shredded Wheat ad is in copyright according to URLs linked in Commons. Needs to be deleted from Commons.
     Done removed image

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 21:36, 30 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Rollinginhisgrave, thanks for the review - just a quick note that I’ve seen this and will get to it shortly. Pahunkat (talk) 12:02, 1 August 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
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