Talk:Mystery Dungeon: Shiren the Wanderer/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 10:23, 27 October 2016 (UTC)

My plan: sleep, review, contemplate existential crises, review some more. Cognissonance (talk) 10:23, 27 October 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• "The game was met by" — Improve prose: "The game was released to".
• "best in its genre and its platform" — Improve flow: "best in its genre and platform".

Gameplay

• "The player can move in eight directions, and can attack with melee weapons and arrows, and use items with a wide range of effects" — Improve flow: "The player can move in eight directions, attack with melee weapons and arrows, and use items with a wide range of effects".
• "some heal the player, some are used to fling away enemies, and some allow the player" — Improve flow: "some heal the player or are used to fling away enemies, with others allowing the player".

Development

• "who made more use of East Asian elements compared to his more European-styled" — Remove one of the uses of "more".

Release

• "making it too different would make it lose the original's flavor" — Minimize repetition: "making it too different would lose the original's flavor".
• "The game's cover art" — Minimize repetition and make more accurate: "The box art".

Reception

• Add {{Rating|4.5|5}} to the GameSpy score.

Overall

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall: The notes were so insignificant that I edited them myself. Immediate pass.

   Pass/Fail:

   @IDV: Cognissonance (talk) 22:15, 27 October 2016 (UTC)

   @Cognissonance: Thank you. I wonder, though, what do you mean when you say that box art is more accurate than cover art? I thought they were mostly synonymous.--IDV^talk 22:28, 27 October 2016 (UTC)

   @IDV: You're right. I simply took it from the Cover art article and prefer it to the generic version. Cognissonance (talk) 22:45, 27 October 2016 (UTC)