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Lede should be more concise[edit]

"accused of orchestrating the killing, with the motive being life insurance money" -- was he really accused of a motive? Motives are usually not parts of arrests. Facts lead to arrests, not motives. Is there any way of truly proving a motive? -- Melchior2006 (talk) 17:17, 18 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I've removed that part but other parts of your edit made no sense which is why it was reverted. Inexpiable (talk) 20:31, 18 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thx. Here is the next improvement: I cut "when she was attacked" from the lede because it is redundant. If a person is murdered, that automatically implies that they have been attacked. --Melchior2006 (talk) 05:01, 19 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@Melchior2006: I've re-worded the whole thing. Inexpiable (talk) 12:04, 19 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]