Talk:Murder of Helena Jubany
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[edit]I think there are a couple of issues with the lead section:
- The initial sentence ends with the statement "... after being thrown off a terrace into an inner courtyard, stripped naked and with several burns on her body." This is inconsistent with the information in the rest of the article. This wording makes it sound like the victim was stripped of her clothes after the fall, then burned. While the victim was naked and burned when found, her clothes were found on the terrace, along with matches, suggesting the victim was stripping naked and burning took place before the "fall". However, to say the victim was thrown, implies that a particular murder scenario took place. Yet the article says there is insufficient evidence to be certain what happened.
- An article's lead section is supposed to provide an accessible overview that summarizes the most important points of the article. The last sentence of the mentions that: "On 23 March 2020, TV3’s programme CRIMS broadcast a double feature on this case." However, this fact is not even mentioned elsewhere in the article, so I don't understand why it is important enough to appear in the lead, at all. If it is not worth mentioning the body of the article, why put it in the lead?
As a result, I have added a couple of cleanup tags to prompt editors to clean up this article. - Cameron Dewe (talk) 10:36, 19 July 2023 (UTC)
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