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"...also notable for the pre-1840 American formal garden..."
Would read better as "also notable for its"
Done (and changed "the grounds are" to "the grounds is" for subject-verb agreement, since "grounds" can be either singular or plural) cmadler (talk) 16:18, 3 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"The property was listed in the National Register of Historic Places in 1980, with a boundary increase in 1991 associated with the Iron and Steel Resources of Pennsylvania MPS (Multiple Property Submission)."
This feels awkward. Is there a way to rephrase this to say that it was listed as a MPS, or that it became part of a MPS?
"...the most formal ironmaster's mansion built in the area..."
What does this mean? Would a link to another article explain this?
? I'm not sure how else to word this. The area was a major center for iron production, so there were many mansions in the area built by ironmasters. MHE was the most formal of these. I've added a wikilink to Polite architecture, which is not a very good article but will perhaps give an idea of what is meant. cmadler (talk) 16:42, 3 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
That's good, I just wasn't certain what "formal" meant in this sense.
"locally cut", "locally quarried"
Should be hyphenated "locally-cut", "locally-quarried".
It is not a run-on sentence, because the two related independent clauses are properly punctuated using a comma and a coordinating conjunction (",and"). The coordinating conjunction could be replaced with a semicolon if you think that would be better. cmadler (talk) 16:51, 3 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
I'm reading it again and it makes more sense now.
(b) it complies with the manual of style guidelines
If the reference in the title can be used for all the information in the paragraph, it should go at the end of the paragraph. If not, that paragraph needs a source.
Done The cited material is supported by another citation, so that reference is not needed. I'm unable to find these photos elsewhere online, so I've removed these dead links. cmadler (talk) 16:05, 3 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"...and other events held throughout the year."
Examples are needed, or a citation that claims this.
"As part of the Renaissance fair, Romito had a large crenellated wall built adjacent to the mansion."
Needs a source.
Done The wall (including crenellation) is visible adjacent to the mansion in the photo in the infobox, but I can't find a citation confirming that Romito had it built for the Renaissance fair, so I've removed the statement. cmadler (talk) 16:58, 3 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
"The pub is also used for musical and comedy shows throughout the year, both during and after the faire season."
As noted in footnote #13, all the information in the section is drawn from the NRHP Nomination Form. I've added an inline ref to that note at the end of each of the subsections, but if you think it would be better I could go so far as to add it at the end of each paragraph. cmadler (talk) 15:08, 3 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
WP:REF recommends adding references at the end of the relevant sentence or paragraph, rather than the end of a section/subsection.
I've added a little source data to the references, and split the one note in the article into a separate Notes section. The article meets all the GA criteria, as far as I can tell, and I'm going to pass it now. This was my first review, and I hope you found my comments and suggestions useful. --Gyrobo (talk) 03:19, 4 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Well-written
Done - reworded. cmadler (talk) 16:18, 3 November 2010 (UTC)
