Talk:Moses Gray (American football)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 22:17, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Notes

I added an image
The infobox doesn't follow the proper team chronology right now.
- So, should I say "Titans (1961)* - Warriors (1961) - Titans (1961-1962) - Warriors (1962)"?
  - yes, they released him. Its not like nfl europe where they put people on the exempt list or whatever. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 00:15, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I'm not sure those highlights are notable enough for the infobox.
- Removed.
Were you able to find any more info on his college career like stats or honors?
- Wasn't able to.
"213th overall" change to 214th
- Done.
"In his sophomore and junior seasons, he averaged 18 minutes played per game" Maybe I missed something but I think the source is only talking about his junior year?
- Changed.
"before seeing more action as a senior" The source used for that is before the season started
- Changed to saying he was a starter as a senior with a new ref.
"afterwards was sent to the Indianapolis Warriors" I don't see Gray mentioned in the source
- Its in part 2.
"and retired afterwards" I don't see in that source where he "retired"
- Changed the phrasing some.
ref 1 says he was born in Rock Castle, Goochland County.
- I read it say "Moses was born on April 12th, 1937, in Goochland, VA" - where do you see Rock Castle?
  - sry i meant ref 3 the moses gray papers WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 00:15, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
    - @WikiOriginal-9: I just changed it to "Goochland County" BeanieFan11 (talk) 00:21, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]
ref 1 says he furthered his education at Michigan and the General Motors Institute (whatever that us) if we can find any more info about that
- I'm not seeing it, could you provide a quote?
  - oops sry i mean ref 3
    - Added.
Should we link telethon if that's actually what it means?
- Linked.
"becoming in 1972 the state's" comma after 1972
- Added.
Link Cambria County in body
- Linked.

That's all I think. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 22:17, 19 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@WikiOriginal-9: BeanieFan11 (talk) 23:47, 24 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]

All points have been addressed. Passing the article. Nice work! WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 00:30, 25 October 2023 (UTC)[reply]