Talk:More than Friends (Jason Mraz song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 14:51, 25 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Lead and infobox

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For this part (for his sixth studio album), I would use “from” instead of “for”.
I am not sure if the reference in the lead is necessary, as the part about it being released as the fourth single should also be located and sourced in the body of the article.
I would revise this sentence (Lyrically, the "bubbly" and "quirky" acoustic love song details the feelings of a pair of friends who are interested in taking their relationship to the next level, with vibes of a budding summer romance.) to the following suggested revision (A "bubbly" and "quirky" acoustic love song, “More than Friends” is about a pair of friends interested in taking their relationship to the next level, with implications of a summer romance.).
For this sentence (Released on September 17, 2018, the video features a meta concept where a pair of co-workers at a video shoot admit romantic feelings for each other, interspersed with scenes of the singers performing the song.), I would make this part (interspersed with scenes of the singers performing the song) into its own sentence as the sentence is somewhat of a run-on.
I would mention the dance video in the lead. I would also include the chart information in the lead.

Background and composition

I would revise this sentence ("More than Friends" was written by Jason Mraz, Meghan Trainor, Jonathan Green and Andrew Wells, and produced by the latter.) to the following (Andrew Wells produced “More than Friends” and co-wrote it with Jazon Mraz, Meghan Trainor, and Jonathan Green.).
For this part (Mraz agreed to this, unsure of what would come of it.), I would add “but was unsure” to help with the flow of the sentence.
I would add the year that “Lucky” was released.
Clarify in the prose (The song was described as "breezy" and “ebullient”.) who is doing the describing here. Critics? Fans? The performers/songwriters/producers?

Music video

For this sentence ( Darren Doane directed the music video for "More than Friends" which was released through Mraz's YouTube channel.), I would avoid having four citations to avoid a citation overkill.
It seems odd to have a subsection with just one sentence? Would it be possible to integrate it with the rest of the section.

Live performances

Since this section has only one sentence, would it be possible to integrate this into the “Music video” section to create a more general promotion section?

Missing sections

The article should have a “Credits and Personnel” section and a “Release history” section. I would also add an “External links” section with a link to the Metrolyrics page as that is an official lyric provider.
Also, were there any critical reviews for this song?
The information from the "Charts" section also needs to be represented in prose-form.

References

The word “video” should not be in all caps for reference 14.

Final comments

Good work with the article. Once my comments are addressed, I will read through the article again and most likely pass it. Have a wonderful rest of your day and/or night. Aoba47 (talk) 14:51, 25 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

All

Done, really glad to have gotten a review so early for this fairly obscure song! The only thing I couldn't do is add a critical reception section because none of the sources covering the song's release were critical and none of the album reviews mentioned it.--N Ø 15:49, 25 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for addressing everything, and that makes sense to me. I only have one comment left, and that is the article still needs a "Release history" section as it was released as a single. Once that is added, I will be more than happy to pass this. Great work with it! Aoba47 (talk) 16:05, 25 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Verdict

I will ✓ Pass this now. Aoba47 (talk) 17:13, 25 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]