Talk:Montreal Laboratory/GA1

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 16:33, 2 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

I'll start this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:33, 2 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Images appropriately licensed.
On returning to England, Cockroft arranged through Lord Melchett for Laurence to receive a $5,000 grant from Imperial Chemical Industries (ICI) through a Canadian subsidiary to continue his research. this is awfully long, either break it in two or punctuate the clauses.
Y Split it in twain. Hawkeye7 (talk) 01:48, 7 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Overlinking of Port Radium, Northwest territories, heavy water, etc.
Y Removed the duplicate links. Hawkeye7 (talk) 01:48, 7 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
whereby Thode became did work for the Montreal Laboratory fix this
Y Deleted "became" Hawkeye7 (talk) 01:48, 7 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Link the Coast Guard cutter Sequoia.
Y Linked. Hawkeye7 (talk) 01:48, 7 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
External links OK.
That's all I spotted on the first pass.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:49, 6 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
@Sturmvogel 66: Anything happening here? Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:25, 20 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
which followed on 21 July 1947, which for a time was the most powerful rephrase, too many "which"s
Y Rewritten. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:19, 21 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Ernest Cormier, the university architect, drew up the plans Not sure that this is really important enough for inclusion.
Apparently he is a very notable architect over there. With his own article. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:19, 21 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
B. W. Sargent then became Head of the nuclear do not capitalize head.
Y Just a typo. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:19, 21 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Take care of these minor points and we'll be done.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:12, 20 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]