Talk:Midas Touch (book)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 16:15, 11 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 16:15, 11 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Not necessary for GA, but footnote 33 is missing an ISBN.
The summary section needs copyediting for repetitive sentence structure and some clumsinesses.
entrepreneurship success is learned through multiple failures in business in order to learn best how to succeed: redundant.
Trump writes this is due to a fear of failure, and ascribes business success to the experience of learning from failures: this just repeats the previous paragraph, now with reference to Trump; instead of the repetition, give the opinion and say it's stated by both men.
writing, that the oncoming disappearance...: no comma is needed in this sort of indirect quotation. I haven't cleaned these up because I hope a copyedit will reduce the number of these.
Trump explained his motivation for wanting to work with Kiyosaki, saying he was motivated by: wordy; could be cut to " Trump was motivated to work with Kiyosaki by". There's a similarly wordy sentence in the next paragraph.
The "Composition and publication" section needs a copyedit for wordiness and flow.
Are there reviews from other major publications that could be used for the reception section?

-- Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 16:54, 11 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Sagecandor, are you planning to work on this? If not I'll fail the article in another week. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 14:14, 18 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Mike Christie: I have addressed the green comments and copyedited the summary. Source 33 is a Kindle ebook, which do not have ISBNs. Let me know if you have any other concerns. Argento Surfer (talk) 20:44, 2 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. Promoting. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 02:01, 10 March 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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