Talk:Mehdi Khalil/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:52, 2 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

"indeed, he was the fifth tallest goalkeeper at the 2019 AFC Asian Cup." - don't think this should be in the lead
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:27, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"first at Koping FF and then at Djurgården." - first playing at Köping FF before transferring to Djurgårdens.
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:27, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"Khalil started playing five-a-side football," - Djurgården Fotboll says it was six-a-side football not five-a-side
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:30, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"at age 12 Khalil started playing five-a-side football, popular in Sierra Leone," - Khalil began playing six-a-side football, a popular form of football in Sierra Leone, at age 12 at Young Sportsmen Club as a defender.
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:30, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"He switched to football at age 15, moving to Johansen." - At age 15, he moved to Johansen to switch to Johansen to play football.
- I've changed it in At age 15, he moved to Johansen to play football. Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:30, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"Khalil was nominated best goalkeeper" - named
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:31, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"he made his debut for the club's under-21 side in the U21 Allsvenskan [sv] against Brage, helping his side win 5–1." - repetition of "side"
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:31, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"However, Safa still won the encounter 3–2 thanks to a 92nd-minute" - through a 92nd-minute
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:33, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"In 2015–16," - In the 2015-16 season,
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:33, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Khalil played 16 league games[7] helping Safa win" - a comma is mssing between "games" and "helping"
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:33, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Following his contract's expiry in summer 2016," - Following the expiration of his contract in mid-2016
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:33, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"He remained with Safa one further year," - with Safa for one
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:33, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"Khalil moved to Lebanese champions" - championship club
- I meant to highlight the fact that Ahed were the title holders on the league. I've changed it to Khalil moved to Lebanese Premier League holders. Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:34, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"He was part of the squad that played in the 2018 FIFA World Cup qualification between 2015 and 2016" - qualification stage
- Changed to qualifiers
"initially Abbas Hassan's reserve for the first three games, Khalil became Lebanon's first-choice goalkeeper in the final five games" - repetition of "games"
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:38, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"gained access to" - qualified them for
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:38, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"However, the three points were not enough to qualify Lebanon to the" - for the
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:38, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"and a big physical presence." - large
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:40, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
"Indeed, at 1.96 m tall," - the Template:Convert template is needed for the text in bold
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:40, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
The word "indeed" in the above sentence is not needed
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:40, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The club portion of the honours section needs to be fully referenced
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:42, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

All of the references that state the author should be included
- Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 17:46, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
All of the sources that are written in a language other than English should be clearly indicated
- Done. I've also added script titles for Arabic titles, and translated titles for non-English titles. Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 17:46, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 10:55, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: I should have taken care of everything. Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 17:46, 3 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]