Talk:McLaren/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: TonyTheTiger (talk · contribs) 22:37, 7 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

External links tool to the right shows at least 4 dead links.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:04, 8 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Dab links tool shows a couple of issues outstanding.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:04, 8 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Many of the issues from Talk:McLaren/GA1 have been addressed. Certainly the last three seem to have been addressed. I will evaluate the indented bullets as the review progresses (as I read the rest of the prose). The issues from those bullets were as follows:--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:52, 8 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The article is almost wholly concerned with the results of the racing team. It does not discuss things such as
- Budget
- Structure of the team and roles of the technical staff in the team, especially as the engineering is bigger component of the success than any driver can be these days
- Team politics, whether drivers are allowed to race freely etc
- Information about the team's factory, research facilities, wind-tunnel, supercomputers etc, staff
- Fan following/merchandise etc

If this trades publicly, why don't you include exchange and ticker symbol in the WP:LEAD and infobox information like most corporations.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:47, 8 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I am of reasonable intelligence and do not know where or what surrey is. I am guessing by its placement in the sentence it is a county/province, but please link this municipality.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:22, 11 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
What is a constructor?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:22, 11 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
What is a constructors' championship?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:42, 11 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
With the statement that they last won in 2008, I am left to wonder how active they are. Would it be difficult to maintain something like in the last completed season, the team won x races? Saying you have not won a series in 5 years makes it difficult for a reader to assess the current state of the operation.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:22, 11 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Aren't there links for types of engines such as 1.5-litre Formula One-specification engines instead of the 2.5-litre motors?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:22, 11 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

'C' version on the M7 seems like it should have its own article or at least be named M7C or be described as the C version of the M7A.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 06:42, 11 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"test driver Pedro de la Rosa deputised for the remainder of the season." seems to need a verb.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:18, 18 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

3rd para, 1st sentence should be broken up. It appears to be run on.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:23, 18 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

What is the Can-Am Series? If this thing is important enough to have its own section, you should provide a link like the one in the caption to the right.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 07:35, 23 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The following year Robin Herd purpose-designed the Chevrolet V8 powered M6A, delays with the Formula One programme allowing the team to spend extra resources on developing the Can-Am car which was the first to be painted in McLaren orange." seems ungrammatical. Maybe runon.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 07:35, 23 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"With Denny Hulme now partnering Bruce" seems to be missing a with.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 07:35, 23 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

what does "an interim testing livery" mean? is there a link?--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:20, 26 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Merge all succession boxed for the same topic (see Barry Bonds #External links]]).

I am failing this due to the lengthy list of issues above in addition to the largely unresolved breadth issues stemming from the prior review (mentioned at the top of this review).--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 03:36, 29 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]