Talk:Matthew Charles Johnson/GA1

GA Review

Passed. Arconning · (talk · contribs) 08:37, 14 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

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Nominator: GMH Melbourne (talk · contribs) 12:48, 29 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Arconning (talk · contribs) 16:11, 11 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

I will be reviewing this, comments will probably be finished in the next 72 hours! Arconning (talk) 16:11, 11 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@GMH Melbourne Here are my comments for now, hope they can be addressed. Arconning (talk) 06:47, 14 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@Arconning: Done, I have made all the suggested changes below (here).

RE Guessing "para" means paragraph, would suggest for it to be spelled out, most style manuals say to shorten it "para." (chicago, Harvard p2, APA). I couldn't find anything in wikipedia's MOS. Let me know your thoughts. GMH Melbourne (talk) 07:29, 14 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Prose and MoS

Lead and infobox

criminal offending, criminal offences.

Early life

9 August 1973, add comma at the end.
who channelled his , and channelled his.
from the age , at the age.
I suggest changing year 7 and year 10 to the spelled out versions of the numbers.

Criminal history

terms in HM Prison Pentridge., in to at.
Spending adulthood, add After before the statement.
Barwon Prison, hyperlink to HM Prison Barwon.
to be not guilty , omit to be.
house whilst the occupants, replace whilst with while.
Would suggest changing pled guilty to pleaded guilty.

Murder of Carl Williams

to the Corrections Victoria, remove the.
police officer, Paul Dale, remove comma.
Many prison staff, and top-level Victorian, remove comma.
trusting Williams' wishes,, remove comma.
was released on parole, add comma at the end.
then dragged Williams', change dragged to drag for consistent tense.
as "fanciful" and , remove as and add a comma at the end.
Johnson as saying–, I suggest changing the endash with a comma.

Life inside prison

Capitalize "The" in "The General".
He is the leader of the gang, "Prisoners of War",, would rewrite to He is a leader of a gang named "Prisoners of War"
He is the leader of the gang, "Prisoners of War", and writes poetry about his time inside jail., remove commas.
conviction of murdering, conviction for murdering.

Images

Images have proper licenses and are suitable. If a free image of Johnson is available, it should be uploaded

Refs

Guessing "para" means paragraph, would suggest for it to be spelled out.
Sources seem reliable.

Spotchecks

Reference 6 seems so-so, per Wikipedia:Reliable sources/Perennial sources. Conditional pass.
Reference 18 seems good.
Earwig's not working, wait for check.
- Seems good.
Manual check, seems alright.

Misc

No ongoing edit war, focused and broad on the topic. Nothing out of the ordinary, pass.

Good Article review progress box

Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

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