Talk:Mass Effect 2: Arrival/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 10:30, 8 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
"$6.99 USD " - repetition; how about "US$ 6.99"

"and elite human soldier " - do you mean "an"?

"and the fact that the pack mostly consists of linear combat sequences, " - perhaps "and too many linera combat sequences" or similar. The main issue is "the fact that the"; does not flow well

"still praiseworthy" - I would remove "still" as you only mentioned story and sequences

" in order to progress" - could be just "to progress"

"Unlike most of the missions, Arrival introduces a new mission " - repetition of "mission". It is a bit confusing, so suggest replacing one of the words

"a deep cover agent" - what does "deep" mean here?

Can you explain that Shephard "has" two genders?
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: A few minor suggestions and issues.--Kürbis (✔) 10:32, 15 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Pass/Fail:

Thank you for your review -- much appreciated. I've addressed the issues you brought up. Let me know if there's anything else. --Niwi3 (talk) 10:59, 15 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. Pass the article. Regards.--Kürbis (✔) 17:25, 15 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]