A fact from Mary Hogarth appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 8 March 2017 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:
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A number of published sources give her birth date as 26 October 1819, which fits with her dying aged 17 in May 1837, about five months before her 18th birthday. Is there any source which gives a specific date of birth in the first half of 1820? What is the best one? Or might they perhaps have subtracted 17 from 1837 and made a wrong assumption? — Preceding unsigned comment added by 213.205.251.246 (talk) 17:09, 8 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]
"Mary Scott Thompson Hogarth (26 October 1819[a] – 7 May 1837[b]) was the sister-in-law of Charles Dickens and the sister of Catherine Dickens (née Hogarth)." - would it be more clear if you said "the sister of Catherine Dickens, the wife of Charles Dickens"?
Done
"Charles and Catherine Dickens' first child was named Mary in memory of Hogarth." - I think "in her memory" would flow better here.
Done
Life
"She was the third of ten children, and second daughter.[2][3]" - "the" before "second"
Done and corrected to fourth child
" Hogarth was named after her grandmother.[4]:73" - do you know on which side?
Done Paternal
"Her father George was also a music critic, cellist and composer, who worked for the Edinburgh Courant magazine. In 1830, he founded the Halifax Guardian, in 1834 he became a music critic for The Morning Chronicle newspaper in London, and in 1835 he became editor-in-chief of The Evening Chronicle, a post he held for twenty years.[5]" - not sure all this detail is necessary for er father; I'd just say he was a musician, music critic and editor-in-chief
Done Moved the details to her father's article
Death
"She died at around 15:00 later that day at the Dickens family home" - local time or UTC?
Done clarified local time as I'm not 100% sure that it was UTC
"As a reason for missing the publication dates, he wrote that "he had lost a very dear young relative to whom he was most affectionately attached, and whose society has been, for a long time, the chief solace of his labours"." - citation?
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Inspiration for Dickens characters
"Mary is believed to have been the inspiration for a number of Dickens characters." - bit too similar to the section title; would suggest changing to something less direct
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"In the book, Maylie suffered a sudden illness, similar to how Hogarth did." - don't think you need to point out the similarity again as that's redundant; also this sentence is wordy
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"However, Dickens chose for Maylie not to die, and for a happy ending instead.[10] " - how so?
"Little Nell in The Old Curiosity Shop inherited beauty and gentleness, innocence and purity, traits that Dickens had associated with Mary, as well as the fact Nell dies suddenly in the book.[10][12]" - again, wordy; and what is going on with the commas for "beauty and gentleness, innocence and purity" - why is "and" there twice for one list?
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"Kate Nickleby, the 17-year-old sister of the hero of the novel Nicholas Nickleby; Agnes Wickfield, the heroine in David Copperfield (her character was a mixture of both Mary and Georgina, another of Dickens' sister-in-laws), Ruth Pinch from Martin Chuzzlewit,[10][7][9][13] Lilian, the child-guide of Trotty Veck's visions in The Chimes, and Dot Peerybingle, the sister in The Cricket on the Hearth.[9]" - suggest using semicolons to separate each character
The author David Perdue is a Dickens researcher, who has been cited in other books and sources such as [2], [3], [4]
Given the extensive further reading section, I have to wonder whether or not this article is fully comprehensive. Have all the available sources been consulted for Hogarth's life?
See comment at the end of this for my reply
Earwig's Tool
" Lilian, the child-guide of Trotty Veck's visions in The Chimes," - is a little too close to the source for my comfort. Otherwise, looks fine and no copyright violation concerns.
File:Mary_Scott_Hogarth's_tombstone.jpg - relatively unconvinced that this image is actually within the public domain; the uploader at the source does not outrightly claim to release their images for public use, so I think it would be safe to assume they are not free to use (unless you know of evidence to the contrary?)
First round of comments. Might have additional prose suggestions and happy to follow up about references/comprehensiveness concerns. ceranthor02:47, 17 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]
I've updated the above with the things I've done
To answer your question about the further reading section, they were all used as sources but not inline on the French article. But many of the books cover a lot of the same material (death and character inspiration mainly), so I do not believe there is substantial content missing from the article
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