Talk:Martin Stephens (drug smuggler)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Grandiose (talk · contribs) 10:39, 6 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I will be conducting the review shortly. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 10:39, 6 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Citation needed tags must be fulfilled;
I have added some more where they are necessary;
Refs 15 and 17 have dead links and should be updated or replaced.
If "Criticism of Australian Federal Police tipoff" is indeed relevant to Martin Stephens - who is not mentioned - this needs to be made clearer or the section removed if not;
The English should be tightened - the use of so many quotations gives the article a journalistic rather than encyclopedic tone - for example the part about "dobbing them in".
The lead should be longer - it needs to provide an adequate summary per WP:LEAD)
The article ought to say more about the man personally - but this sort of thoroughness is not required under the GACR
I'm also worried about some bias against the Indonesian authorities. Much is made of his appeals, and that of the Australian government. There is little from Indonesia in this regard. A few tweaks, such as a corresponding quotation or the Indonesian side of the story from a native newspaper would be sufficient.
I also raise the same image problems Jezhotwells did at Talk:Andrew Chan/GA1. Under a life imprisonment, he won't be dead any time soon.

Placing on hold for 7 days so these problems can be fixed.

Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 10:47, 6 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Failing per 7 day wait and comments made at the nominator's talk page which amount to a withdrawal. Once the issues have been fixed, feel free to nominate the article again - there is no minimum period for good faith nominations. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 14:35, 13 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]