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Former good article nomineeMarnie (dog) was a Social sciences and society good articles nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There may be suggestions below for improving the article. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.
Did You KnowIn the news Article milestones
DateProcessResult
March 24, 2015Peer reviewReviewed
April 12, 2015Articles for deletionKept
June 9, 2015Good article nomineeNot listed
Did You Know A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on April 16, 2015.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Marnie, a Shih Tzu dog, has received over one million Instagram followers from photos taken by her owner?
In the news A news item involving this article was featured on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "In the news" column on March 9, 2015.
Current status: Former good article nominee

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Marnie (dog)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Viriditas (talk · contribs) 21:33, 11 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Criteria

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Good Article Status - Review Criteria

A good article is—

  1. Well-written:
  2. (a) the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct; and
    (b) it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.[1]
  3. Verifiable with no original research:
  4. (a) it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline;
    (b) reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose);[2] and
    (c) it contains no original research.
  5. Broad in its coverage:
  6. (a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic;[3] and
    (b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
  7. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  8. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
  9. [4]
  10. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  11. [5]
    (a) media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content; and
    (b) media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.[6]

Review

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  1. Well-written:
  2. Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (prose) Lead: wording. See discussion below. Don't know Don't know
    (b) (MoS) Appearances and merchandise: short section should be merged into previous. See discussion below. Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Layout: "Very short or very long sections and subsections in an article look cluttered and inhibit the flow of the prose...Short paragraphs and single sentences generally do not warrant their own subheading". Don't know Don't know
  3. Verifiable with no original research:
  4. Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (references) OK. Pass Pass
    (b) (citations to reliable sources) OK. Pass Pass
    (c) (original research) OK. Pass Pass
  5. Broad in its coverage:
  6. Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (major aspects) Major aspects of Marnie's story are missing from the short, current article, particularly important details noted in at least two sources, Billboard[1] (I can send you a copy if you like; Griffith, Carson. "Marnie the Dog's music festival fame: a rescued 12-year-old Shih Tzu finds a second life in the arms of celebrities and catapults to Instagram fame." Billboard 16 Aug. 2014: 30.) and People.[2] These details are important to framing the narrative and getting the article right. There are a few, but I'll briefly note them here: 1) It is important to note that Shirley Braha is a TV producer because Braha was working on the show Weird Vibes for MTV at the 2013 South by Southwest conference. This led to a "tour" of sorts on the festival circuit allowing Marnie to interact with celebrities and increase her exposure. And that is the sole reason she became popular, an important point this article neglects to mention. This is the difference between asserting popularity and describing it. 2) her big break was getting photographed with Miley Cyrus at a party. This article neglects to mention that fact. 3) her visibility increased by promoting "Adopt A Senior Pet Month" and "American Express's Small Business Saturday", 4) random encounters on the streets of New York City have led to encounters with other celebrities. Fail Fail
    (b) (focused) OK. Pass Pass
  7. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  8. Notes Result
    OK. Pass Pass
  9. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
  10. Notes Result
    Currently stable; however, it went through an AfD and a peer review a month ago. Pass Pass
  11. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  12. Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales) Possible case of unintentional flickr washing (license laundering). The image in question was originally posted to Marnie's Instagram and tumblr account.[3][4] Such images are automatically non-free per Instagram. Two days later, it was posted to Adam Rifkin's website "pandawhale.com"[5] by Adam himself, and then to his flickr site with a free license.[6] There is no indication that Adam Rifkin received permisison to relicense the image. Don't know Don't know
    (b) (appropriate use with suitable captions) Neutral Undetermined

Result

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Result Notes
Fail Fail On hold to address issues listed above and below. Viriditas (talk) 06:24, 18 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Well, this has been on hold for three weeks now and I've seen no response from the nominator. In at least two separate instances I've contacted the nominator on their talk page and offered my help with the needed changes. There has been no response to my repeated requests, and throughout this time, the nominator has been active on Wikipedia. I'm therefore failing this article. Viriditas (talk) 02:52, 9 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Discussion

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Prose style
  • Remove "as a result" whenever you see it as it is unnecessary. It's used three times in this article, for no good reason. Viriditas (talk) 05:18, 14 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Recent additions to the lead continue to assert and "beg" notability rather than describe it. For example, the lead currently says:
    • 1. "Photos of Marnie have been popular on Instagram and Twitter"
    • 2. "videos of Marnie on Vine, which have also garnered significant attention"
    • 3. " Marnie's popularity originated from her photos on Instagram"
    • 4. "which Braha added to since 2014, and has since became popular."
    • 5. "Marnie is especially famous for her permanent head tilt to the left"
  • This is really unnecessary and reads like a response to the AfD. Assert and/or describe notability or popularity once. Five times in the lead section is simply ridiculous. Keep in mind, this is already in addition to you describing her notability on Instagram and Twitter, which means you've actually said she's popular seven times in the lead section. Try to write from an encyclopedic point of view, as if you had to describe Marnie to people in the future. There's no need to say she's popular seven times when you can describe it without using those words. Viriditas (talk) 04:53, 18 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Marnie's popularity originated from her photos on Instagram, under the handle @marniethedog, which Braha added to since 2014, and has since became popular.
Infobox
  • Known parameter says "they have garnered significant attention"; that's not needed as that is the entire reason for the parameter and is basically begging the question. Instead of saying "Pictures of Marnie posted by Braha on various social networking services", just say "Internet celebrity". I think that covers it. Viriditas (talk) 22:33, 11 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Lead
  • Thanks for fixing this. However, the peer review initially raised this problem several months ago. I will need to proceed carefully here to make sure previous concerns have been addressed.[7]. Viriditas (talk) 03:36, 18 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
  • Recent edits have attempted to expand the lead section per the above, however this has somewhat confused things. First I read she's a dog adopted by Braha and how she has become an Internet celebrity. Then, I'm surprised by the second paragraph which tells me she was suddenly moved to an animal shelter and then adopted. I realize you are trying to summarize the background, but it's disjointed without words leading me into the past. There are several ways to solve this. An easy way would be to replace "In August 2012" and move the first two sentences around in the second paragraph. Something indicating the chronology like, "Braha initially adopted Marnie on Petfinder after she was found by animal control living on the streets of Connecticut". Viriditas (talk) 05:00, 18 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Appearances and merchandise
  • Braha also makes paid visits to events, and sells merchandise featuring Marnie for profit and initially to repay Braha's debt.
    • This reads rather clumsily. "Featuring Marnie for profit and initially to repay Braha's debt" is torturous to read. Short sections are generally discouraged, so I would delete the section heading and merge this into the "popularity" section which should be renamed to "Internet celebrity" or something else. Viriditas (talk) 21:44, 12 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]
External links

Additional notes

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  1. ^ Compliance with other aspects of the Manual of Style, or the Manual of Style mainpage or subpages of the guides listed, is not required for good articles.
  2. ^ Either parenthetical references or footnotes can be used for in-line citations, but not both in the same article.
  3. ^ This requirement is significantly weaker than the "comprehensiveness" required of featured articles; it allows shorter articles, articles that do not cover every major fact or detail, and overviews of large topics.
  4. ^ Vandalism reversions, proposals to split or merge content, good faith improvements to the page (such as copy editing), and changes based on reviewers' suggestions do not apply. Nominations for articles that are unstable because of unconstructive editing should be placed on hold.
  5. ^ Other media, such as video and sound clips, are also covered by this criterion.
  6. ^ The presence of images is not, in itself, a requirement. However, if images (or other media) with acceptable copyright status are appropriate and readily available, then some such images should be provided.