Talk:Mark Brennan (Neighbours)/GA1

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:46, 14 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:46, 14 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Here are the issues I found:

Ref #24 is a deadlink. - Luckily I archived it. - JuneGloom Talk 20:34, 16 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Mark is a perfectionist, who puts his work ahead of everything else and he "struggles" to hold down a relationship because of it" not sure if having just the one word in quotes helps, the quotations could probably be removed. Done
Has there been a discussion on what tenses to use in these types of articles? I ask since most of the character development section is in present tense, and there are sentences in there that should be past tense. I'm probably overthinking this because I know other articles have been written like this before, but it is iffy. - I did find WP:TENSE, which says "generally you should write about fiction using the present tense, not the past tense." But it also says "Conversely, discussion of history is usually written in the past tense and thus 'fictional history' may be presented in that way as well." Is that of any help at all? - JuneGloom Talk 20:34, 16 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
It does help; I'll read over the tense again and see if it still feels iffy. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:50, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"McGregor said that, while it is early days," not sure what is meant here at all. Done - Changed the sentence. - JuneGloom Talk 20:34, 16 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"McGregor shot his final scenes at the end of April and Mark will be seen on screen until June." last appearance can probably be noted and this modified to past tense. Done - Corrected, as he hasn't actually left yet.
"Mark goesg to Harold's Store" goes Done
"Mark then goes to Charlie's and he meets up with" he not needed Done

I'll put the article on hold and will pass it when the issues are fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 03:40, 16 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you very much for the review. - JuneGloom Talk 20:34, 16 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

After giving it another review, the tense seems to be okay, so I'll pass this article. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:37, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you! - JuneGloom Talk 16:15, 17 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]