Talk:Malcolm X/GA2
I'm probably going to pass this, since it meets all but one of the criteria beautifully:
- Well Written - True!
- Verifiable - Very!
- Broad -
See below!Yes. - NPOV - Sure is!
- Stable - Yup!
- Illustrated - Mmhmm!
However, there is one thing that kinda irks me: The Philosophy section seems a little terse. While the biography is in perfect condition, the impact section (i.e., philosophy & legacy) seems lacking. The philosophy section is arranged in a rather listy format, and I think a huge improvement could be made if this were turned into prose. Many people come here looking for what Malcolm X represented without reading some of the contextual points in the biography. I give legacy a pass in this respect, since I think they're related (and I'm not a subject-matter expert).
There is the person, and there is their ideas.
However, I also concede that the two are not independent of each other. Nevertheless, I think the structure of the Philosophy section either needs a revamp and some further clarifications or an idea I haven't thought up. My suggestion is to drop the fake ;headers and turn the general list into prose.
Clarifications include "self-defense" ;header under Beliefs of NOI: why did he reject the civil rights movement? To what extent was his views on ;Black nationalism different from his NOI years? In general: what all changed, and how does it contrast to previous views? What new ideas were there, and how did they come about? What impact have they had? What is the chronology of his ideas? Stuff like this. I hope this makes sense :-p
Anyway, thoughts or comments on this review? Xavexgoem (talk) 10:51, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
- I agree that the Philosophy section is the weakest. I'll work on improving it this evening. — Malik Shabazz (talk · contribs) 15:57, 17 September 2008 (UTC)
- I got rid of the list format and cut the quote farm. I'll try to beef up the section over the next few days. — Malik Shabazz (talk · contribs) 03:03, 18 September 2008 (UTC)
- Much better :-D
- Sorry I haven't replied - been busy with other things. Congrats! Xavexgoem (talk) 16:53, 19 September 2008 (UTC)
- I got rid of the list format and cut the quote farm. I'll try to beef up the section over the next few days. — Malik Shabazz (talk · contribs) 03:03, 18 September 2008 (UTC)