Talk:Madame X Tour/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:36, 24 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

This is one of the qualifying old articles, therefore a review is due easily. --K. Peake 08:36, 24 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Infobox looks good!
Add a comma after studio album
"It consisted exclusively" → "The tour consisted exclusively"
"received some criticism." → "garnered some criticism."
Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine)
"its planned final date," → "its planned end date," to be less repetitive with the body
"after the French government announced" → "following on from the French government announcing" with the pipe
Add another sentence to the second para since three is not enough; maybe a bit more context for the film?

Done

Background and development

Remove commas around Madame X, also the source gives a release date of June 14, 2019
The AllMusic source alone does not back up the generally positive part, so either find a source that does or remove this
"Previous to the album's" → "Prior to the album's"
Write 2019 Billboard Music Awards, as elsewise it could have been one in another year for all readers know
Wikilink Page Six per MOS:LINK2SECT, also the term "in" should be used instead of "on" for a month
Mention here that the BBC News interview was in 2017 because you have wrote that year in the lead
"on May 6 through" → "on May 6, 2019, through"
"the Madame X Tour began and ended" → "the Madame X Tour began and ended, respectively." on the img text, to be clearer
Remove the mixed part since the source does not state that; instead, start the sentence with "Some fans complained of"
"included forty-one musicians," → "included 41 musicians," per MOS:NUM
"12 dancers and 14 of" → "12 dancers, and 14 of"
"staircases and other reconfigurable" → "staircases, and other reconfigurable"
"Wardrobe included a" → "The wardrobe included a"
"with feathered tricorne hat and a chiffon dress" → "with a feathered tricorne hat and a chiffon dress, with"
The source does not specify that the eyepatches are what was inspired by Paris 1902 nor does it say they are Madonna's trademark

Source does mention this: One image has as caption: As part of the stunning designs for Madonna's Madame X tour, Elizabeth Emanuel and her team spent many hours on the signature look - including the famous eye-patches, inspired by her Paris 1902 collection

"Miu Miu and" → "Miu Miu, and"
Wikilink black and white
The source for the ending part of the tour only mentions that cancellation was forced, not what venue she last performed at
Mention that it was "signed vinyls" available like you have do for the previous content that was framed and signed, per the source
"hoodies and tees." → "hoodies, and tees."
"photo booth and a" → "photo booth, and a"

Done

Concert synopsis

It is not sourced anywhere that she performed "Like A Prayer" for an encore, so maybe mention the staircase instead on img text?
Regarding MOS:TVPLOT, are you sure having James Baldwin's quote with no source is not too much detail?
I think it would be more appropriate to write the shows began if this is a generalization and elsewise, mention which show you are summarizing here
"disturb the peace"." → "disturb the peace."" per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
"as if he's been shot." → "as if he had been shot."
Merge the "God's Control" sentence with the number one per them being too short for standing alone
Add the release year of The Nutcracker since this is a film, so the year can be included unlike the songs where it would be too much
"it counted with a" → "it featured a"
"are projected across" → "were projected across"
"Estere and Mercy James" → "Estere, and Mercy James"
Remove full stop after "I'm not your bitch!" since the closing punctuation is inside the quote
Pipe "Vogue" to Vogue (Madonna song)
"shades and high heels." → "shades, and high heels."
"had 14 of the 22 women of" → "had 14 women of" because you introduced the orchestra as having 22 members previously
""Fado Pechincha" and" → ""Fado Pechincha", and" per and being used again very shortly after this
"this last one was" → "the last one was"
The final speech mark is missing after Sodade
"of the video of her daughter Lourdes." → "of the video of Leon." since she is the only person mentioned in this article with the surname
"staircase surrounded by" → "staircase while surrounded by"
Wikilink music video

Done

Reception

Critical

"received positive reviews from critics;" → "was met with generally positive reviews from critics." since this should not be in a review's sentence
"Rob Sheffield deemed it" → "Rob Sheffield deemed the tour" with the wikilink
"concluding that it "proves Madonna" → "concluding that it proves "Madonna" per the real quote/grammar
Any full sentences quoted from the sources should have the punctuation inside speech marks per MOS:QUOTE
"album and show, "Madame X" is" → "album and show, 'Madame X' is" because you can't use the same speech marks inside quotes
""at times, performance" → ""at times[,] performance" per the inserted comma
"and naming it "one of" → "and "one of" to be less wordy
"writing for Paper, opined it was" → "for Paper, opined the tour was"
Remove duplicate usage of the word example
You should only use single speech marks for the mentions of Madame X in the quotebox per my earlier comment
"from the BBC News gave" → "from BBC News gave"
"Writing for Las Vegas Weekly, Josh Bell" → "For Las Vegas Weekly, Josh Bell"
"also praised: Josh Bell highlighted" → "also praised; Bell highlighted"
Remove the pipes on the songs mentioned in the above sentence
Remove pipe on "Frozen"
Remove pipes on "I Rise" and "Express Yourself"
"Bradley Stern felt the singer had recreated performances from the past:" → "Stern felt the singer had recreated past performances;"
Remove pipe on "Dark Ballet"
Remove pipe on 2019 Billboard Awards and italicise Billboard
Remove pipe on "Batuka"
Like before, separate the summary sentence at the beginning from the first review
"Ilana Kaplan said it was" → "Kaplan said it was"
Remove wikilink on "Papa Don't Preach"
"and presented in" → "and it is presented in" per the source's quote
"Rhian Daly opined that" → "Daly opined that"
Remove the comma directly after Chicago-Sun Times
""the show is hardly" → ""The show is hardly" per this being a full sentence quoted
"expressed that "for Madonna" → "expressed, "For Madonna"
"Victor Fiorillo wrote that" → "Fiorillo wrote that"
"Fiorillo felt the show" → "He felt the show"
"to shrink an arena show" → "to shrink a stadium show" and put more of this review into your own words per WP:QUOTEFARM
Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine) and are there not any more accolades for the show?

Done

Commercial

Shouldn't you write $60 to $760 for consistency?
"On October, Billboard reported that the first sixteen dates" → "In October 2019, Billboard reported that the first 16 dates" per MOS:NUM

Done

Tardiness controversy and cancellations

Retitle to Controversy and cancellations, as readers can wait until the section to see what the controversy was
Add a full-stop at the end of the last sentence on the img text
"is never late". → "is never late." per MOS:QUOTE on full sentences
"at around 1:00 a.m.", the suit" → "at around 1:00 a.m", the lawsuit"
"for the February 5 concert" → "for the February 5, 2020 concert"
The last North American concert should be first per chronological order, plus can you mention where this concert was specifically?
"to all my fans"." → "to all my fans."" per my earlier comment

Done

Documentary

Pipe documentary to Documentary film
"On July 15," → "On July 15, 2021"
"South America, Australia and the" → "Latin America, Australia, and the" since that is what the source says and is not from the South
"Sasha Kasiuha and" → "Sasha Kasiuha, and"
"Alexis Petridis deemed it" → "Alexis Petridis deemed the film" with the wikilink
"opined it was" → "opined the documentary is"

Done

Set list

Remove excess space for 16.
"on February 6, Madonna" → "on February 6, 2020, Madonna"
Simon and Garfunkel → Simon & Garfunkel

Done

Shows

Good

Notes

This should be the section directly before references

Done

Personnel

Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

References

Copyvio score looks fine at 21.9%; ignore the flagged URL since that is practically all due to personnel being listed
Use American style MDY for all dates
Remove or replace ref 6 per WP:PAGESIX
Only keep for the publisher for ref 11
Shouldn't a url access parameter or something similar be used for ref 15?
Remove or replace refs 17 and 28 per WP:FORBES
Author-link Rob Sheffield on ref 23
Remove or replace ref 41 per WP:RSP
Remove or replace ref 50 per above
Cite France 24 as publisher instead on ref 51
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with refs 57, 61 and 73
Author-link Alexis Petridis on ref 58
Remove or replace ref 71 per WP:NYPOST
WP:OVERLINK of NBC News on ref 73 and cite Reuters as publisher instead

Done

External links

Good

Final comments and verdict

On hold until all of the issues are fixed; the sources have quite a few unreliable ones that I covered. --K. Peake 18:38, 24 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I have covered all the points Kyle Peake!, let me know if I have missed anything --Christian (talk) 02:40, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Chrishm21 Nice work in starting on this so fast, but you have missed the fix of the October part in the commercial sub-section and not added anything to The New York Times ref that represents limited access. --K. Peake 08:25, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Kyle Peake I think I might have missed the part regarding limited access what do you mean by that? --Christian (talk) 14:48, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Chrishm21 When clicking on The New York Times articles, you are subject to a limit unless a subscriber. --K. Peake 16:16, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Done Kyle Peake --Christian (talk) 19:04, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Chrism21 ✓ Pass now, but I added a space before the ref's subscription template for you. --K. Peake 21:23, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]