Talk:Luis Muriel/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 10:03, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Will review. Expect comments soon. MWright96 (talk) 10:03, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Lead

Wikilink Serie A Best Young Revelation as you have done in the prose
"He spent two-and-a-half seasons with the club, scoring 21 goals in 79 league appearances before joining current club Sevilla in 2017. " - think we can get away by omitting "current club" since its already established that the currently places for the club not to earlier in the lead

Deportivo Cali

" Muriel joined Colombian Primera A side Deportivo Cali in January 2012." - it should be January 2009 as indiicated in the career statstics table
"before scoring 'scoring nine goals in 10 appearances the following season" - remove the second mention of the word "scoring"
"Udinese officially completed the signing of Muriel, who was 19-years-old at the time, on 30 May 2010 for a reported fee of €1.5m." - here's an improvement Udinese officially completed the signing of Muriel, who was 19 at the time, on 30 May 2010 for a reported fee of €1.5 million
"Shortly after his arrive in Udine, however, he was loaned to Segunda División side Granada." - arrival and this sentence is lacking a citation.

Return to Udinese

"with the club manager insiting that he needed to lose five pounds," Use the convert template to convert five pounds into kilograms
"including a spell of zero goals in 11 matches" - including a speed without any goals in 11 matches

Sevilla

"netting the winner in a 1-0 victory over Girona." - the hyphen should be replaced by the en dash as has been done earlier in the article

Colombia national U20 team

"he scored the only goal of the match as Colombia beat Korea Republic 1–0 to progress from the group stages with a perfect record." - ge scored the only goal of the match as Colombia defeated the Korea Republic 1–0 to progress from the group stages with a perfect record. - also Korea Republic is a dab link.
"Muriel ultimately scored four goals for the tournament before Colombia were knocked out by Mexico in the quarter-finals." - this statement requires a citation

It's a neat effort you have put in as far. On hold until everything I have raised above has been addressed. MWright96 (talk) 12:25, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Hi MWright96, thank you very much for the review. I've made all of the above changes as per your recommendations. The only instance where I deviated slightly from your review was in point 3 of Deportivo Cali above where I removed reference to his age altogether. Please let me know if there are any further concerns. Cheers, Liam E. Bekker (talk) 13:26, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

- @Liam E. Bekker: Thank you for your quick response to my queries. Can now promote to GA. Note: I have made a small alteration to the prose to a statement which sounded a little informal. MWright96 (talk) 13:55, 12 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]