Jump to content

Talk:Love, Blactually/GA2

Page contents not supported in other languages.
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

[edit]

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: M.Mario (talk · contribs) 15:35, 3 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewing per request at my talk page.

Infobox

[edit]
  • Put who the two guest actors played

Lead

[edit]
  • Space between Actually.The
  • Rmv "however", not needed.
  • Are you going to put Brian (actor's name)?
  • "It received mixed to positive reviews from critics for its storyline and many cultural references." -> just put mixed.
  • "It received mixed to positive reviews from critics for its storyline and many cultural references." -> no reviewer talked about cultural references, so put; "* "It received mixed reviews from critics for its storyline".
  • "According to Nielsen ratings, it was viewed in 9.2 million homes in its original airing" -> "According to Nielsen ratings, it was watched by 9.2 million viewers in its original airing".
  • "along with several recurring guest voice actors for the series" - Reword. -> "along with several recurring voice actors from the series".

Plot

[edit]
  • During a costume party, Lois suggests that Brian find a new girlfriend. -> Link Brian (seperate section), and "During a costume party, Lois suggests that Brian should find a girlfriend."
  • "he finds out that Carolyn began to date Cleveland" -> "he finds out that Carolyn has began to date Cleveland".
  • "Feeling sorry for Brian, Stewie suggests that find Cleveland's ex-wife, Loretta, and convince her to reconcile" -> Need to expand on the sentence - why do they look for her?
  • Fix correct link to The Cleveland–Loretta Quagmire.
  • "Since both Brian and Cleveland have been cheated on by the same woman, they make amends." -> for what?

Production

[edit]
  • "It was written by the show's main voice actor" -> Makes it sound like Henry is the main character of the show.
  • Rmv "and veteran writer".
  • "In addition to the regular cast, actress Kat Foster portrayed the voice of Carolyn, and actress Meredith Baxter portrayed herself" -> Reference?
  • "Recurring guest voice actors" -> Dodgy term of phrase.

CR

[edit]
  • "The episode's title is a reference to the British romantic comedy film Love Actually" -> Source?
  • "Woodstock also makes a cameo appearance" -> Explain what show he is from.
  • "Cleveland's deadpan exclamation of "...and boom goes the dynamite" during sex with Carolyn is a reference to an Owen Wilson line from the film Shanghai Noon used during Ball State University student Brian Collins' appearance as television sports anchor, which became an Internet sensation." -> Too long and Reference?
  • "Cleveland and Carolyn meet at a Starbucks" -> Back this up with an overview of the episode.

Reception

[edit]
  • "Family Guy" -> Italics.

- Tell me on my talk page when you have finished/if you have any questions. — M.Mario (T/C) 15:35, 3 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]