Talk:Lots of Mommies/GA1

GA review

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Reviewer: AryKun (talk · contribs) 12:12, 18 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Link picture book in lead.
"by Jane Severance, illustrated by Jan Jones" → "written by Jane Severance and illustrated by Jan Jones"
Background should be before Plot imo.
"her mother Jill" → "her biological mother Jill", since all of the women are her mothers?
Link jungle gym.
Lollipop Power is linked in the lead and not in the body.
I would like to see the Background section expanded with the stuff in When Megan Went Away.
"In 2012 the" → "In 2012, the"
Link commune.
Use an as of template for "As of the 2010s". Also, this is a bit dated, is there no more recent info for this?

"The Lion and the Unicorn" link in the first citation is to the heraldic symbol, not the journal.
Spot-checks done on "Southern Sisters children's bibliography" found that the reference supported the claims made.
Spot-checks done on "Setting the record 'straight': An interview with Jane Severance" found that the reference supported the claims made.

Hi AryKun, thanks for this kind review. I've addressed all of the above points as requested. Regarding the "as of the 2010s" bit, unfortunately there's no more recent info here; Lots of Mommies had a burst of interest early last decade but hasn't been written about much in the '20s so far. Here's hoping there's more scholarship in the pipeline but this really covers all there's been lately. —⁠Collin^{t c} 00:00, 24 February 2022 (UTC)[reply]