Talk:Live Concert at the Forum/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 20:19, 4 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Grabbing this for a review. Aoba47 (talk) 20:19, 4 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Lead and infobox

For this part (t was recorded at The Forum in Los Angeles on April 15, 1972, during), I do not believe that the comma between “1972” and “during” is really necessary.

Done

I would include information about the critical response in the lead.

Done

Please mark in the infobox that Richard Perry is the executive producer of the album.

Done

I have a question about this part (retitled Barbra Streisand Live in some countries). In the body of the article, you only say that the album was released under this name in Canada. Do you have sources for other countries?

Done

Background

Please use Streisand’s full name on the first mention in the body of the article, and link it.

Done

I think that this part (The album's songs were recorded during the 4 for) is incomplete.

Actually, that's just the name of the concert – maybe how I added apostrophes around it will help.

Something about this sentence (During select live renditions, and to warn the public on the misuse of drugs and alcohol, the singer pretended as if she was under the influence of marijuana.) reads awkwardly to me, particularly the placement of the “and to warn the public on the misuse of drugs and alcohol” phrase.

Done – Is it better how I worded it?

For this part (Richard Perry solely and executively produced the album's eleven tracks), “eleven” should be represented as numbers.

Done

Singles

For this sentence (Three singles were released from Live Concert at the Forum, all throughout 1972.), I do not believe that “all” is necessary here.

Done

Please link “Didn’t We” on its first use in the body of the article.

Done

Reception

I think a topic sentence for the first paragraph would be helpful.

Done

Please link "People" and "Stoney End”.

Done

Please italicize Just for the Record... and include the periods at the end. Please include the year in which the album was released.

Done

Track listing

I would make a note here about the producer.

Done

Final comments

Great work with this article! Once my comments are addressed, I will pass this. Have a wonderful rest of your day/night! Aoba47 (talk) 02:56, 5 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: Any updates for this? Aoba47 (talk) 06:29, 12 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Aoba47 – AH I completely forgot about this. Could I go through this this weekend? Thanks, Carbrera (talk) 06:45, 12 April 2018 (UTC).[reply]

Sounds good to me. Aoba47 (talk) 16:30, 12 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

This should be completed within the next 24 hours. Sorry for the wait. Carbrera (talk) 06:58, 16 April 2018 (UTC).[reply]

No worries; take as much time as you need. Aoba47 (talk) 17:06, 16 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Aoba47 – How does it look now? Thanks so much. Carbrera (talk) 22:00, 16 April 2018 (UTC).[reply]

Verdict

Thank you for addressing everything. I will ✓ Pass this. Aoba47 (talk) 22:30, 16 April 2018 (UTC)[reply]

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