Talk:Little Fishing Creek/GA2

GA Review

Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 17:06, 03 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 17:06, 03 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

Looks good; I usually have to add suggestions for the infobox!

Lead

Paragraph 1

You used "in" three times in the first sentence; could you replace with different words to end any repetition?

I don't know of any less awkward way to write it. --Jakob (talk) aka Jakec 12:30, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Paragraph 2

What is the Greenwood Valley? You mention it, but in the way it sounds like the reader should already know what that is

It's just a valley? Tweaked word order slightly, though. --Jakob (talk) aka Jakec 12:30, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Please provide a link for "Pennsylvania Route 42"

Done.

Again, you used "in" three times in the third to last sentence; anyway to replace these words?

Done.

Paragraph 3

What is an "Exceptional Value Stream"?
Plus, should "Exceptional Value Stream" be in all CAPS?

It's an official designation, hence the title case. Specifically, the highest level of protection available in PA. --Jakob (talk) aka Jakec 12:30, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Reword the last sentence to be "Little Fishing Creek contains parts that are suitable to canoe on." Does that sound any better?

Reworded.

Course

Paragraph 1

Nothing here; great work!

Paragraph 2

There's no link for Columbia County here; care to add one?

Okay.

Paragraph 3

This is way too short; please just take it and add it to the previous paragraph

I don't really think it fits with the previous paragraph, unfortunately. --Jakob (talk) aka Jakec 12:30, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Tributaries

You use "of" three times in this sentence couldn't "of the Little..." but switched into "on the Little..."? Let me know what you think...

Reworded, but not in that way.

Hydrology

The last two paragraphs (sentences) of this section should be added elsewhere because it looks like a list; WP is not a list

Some paras merged, which is I guess what you're suggesting.

Geography and geology

Once again, could some of the the statements in this section be added to other paragraphs? I'm sure they could

Done.

Otherwise, another good section! :)

Watershed

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The link for "quadrangle" should be used in its first mention; it is currently used in its second mention

I'm aware of it, and it's a tricky problem to solve. If I do what you suggest, then there are two links immediately adjacent to each other, which I'm pretty sure is also frowned upon. --Jakob (talk) aka Jakec 12:30, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Paragraph 2

Reword to "The watershed of Little Fishing Creek is long compared to its width", removing "fairly"

Reworded, but not in that way.

Paragraph 4

Remove the link to "Pennsylvania Route 42"

Done, but not sure exactly why.

Remove the link to "Sullivan County"

Likewise.

History, industries, and etymology

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"on August 2, 1979. Its identifier in the..." → "on August 2, 1979; its identifier in the..."

Why? Neither sentence is overly short, and that makes it a one sentence paragraph, which is also frowned upon.

Paragraph 3

Is the inclusion of the links for all of the bridges really necessary?

Um...there are only three. All of these have WP articles. --Jakob (talk) aka Jakec 12:30, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Biology

Again, please try to combine some of the statements in this section because they are too short and look like part of a list

Done.

Recreation

Looks good! ;)

End of GA Review:

Looks like a very good article and surprising interesting. I would prefer that parts of the article be combined so it doesn't look like a list. I will put this article on hold for seven days. Thanks! Carbrera (talk) 00:48, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: Thanks, I've responded to all of your comments. --Jakob (talk) aka Jakec 12:30, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Jakec: After reading the text again it makes sense. Thanks for your edits! Carbrera (talk) 20:50, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks! --Jakob (talk) aka Jakec 22:57, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]