Talk:Lindsay Hassett with the Australian cricket team in England in 1948/GA1

GA Review

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I'll be reviewing this article shortly. Ealdgyth - Talk 22:31, 16 February 2009 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Specific concerns

• What's an "on-tour selector"?
• First sentence of the third paragraph of the lead... "... the third highest aggregate behind Bradman and the second highest average." is awkward, with only giving the one person of the two he was behind. Suggest either listing both or listing neither.
• Any reason it's Gentlemen of England, instead of English team?
• Can you combine the third paragraph of Early tour with another paragraph? It's all of one sentence and makes the prose flow choppy.
• Sixth paragraph of early tour "... Hassett led the tourists..." sounds more like a sports page report than an encyclopedia.
• More short paragraphs in First Test that give the prose a choppy feel. Suggest combining them.
• Same for the Role section.

None of the above are serious enough to keep the article back from GA status. Ealdgyth - Talk 23:00, 16 February 2009 (UTC)

None these. A "gentleman" is an amateur. GoE was the best of England's amateur players. YellowMonkey (click here to vote for world cycling's #1 model!) 00:45, 17 February 2009 (UTC)