Talk:Les Holden/GA1

GA Review

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Les Holden

The article was missing persondata but I added it. I also added the birth template to the infobox. I ran the article through AWB but nothing came up there. I reviewed the images and they all appear to have the correct tags and are in the public domain.

• There are a couple of references that appear to be missing the accessdate per Here
  • Yep, in this case they're published books that just happen to be available in full on the web, so they have page numbers and a 'life' independent of the web. The access date thing is really for web-centric sources. I tested this argument in a FAC a year or two ago and it's been accepted since.
• In the second paragraph of the lede you state "his skill earned him" and this seems somewhat POV to me. I think it should just be something like "he earned"
  • Fair enough.
• In the start of the Early life section you state Les Holden and I recommend changing it to just Holden.
  • I did that to clearly distinguish from the father, mentioned in the same sentence, but I guess it's not a big deal.
• In the first paragraph of the World War I section you state "his mechanical bent". I gather from the context that this means ability but I think it shoudl be clarified because some readers won't know.
  • Yep, fine with me.
• In the world war I section I think you should link Major for "Major Oswald Watt".
  • I used to always link ranks but I think it's overkill when the person is linked as well - there are arguments on both sides but this method seems acceptable at GAN/ACR/FAC.
• In the World War I section you have a quote that says "a flying wreck. Every part of it was shot full of holes, including petrol-tank, tail-plane, both longerons, and part of the undercarriage, while the elevator control was shot clean away." without an inline cite.
  • The two citations that follow the next quote cover that whole bit about Cambrai, but I should be able to tweak so the first quote is directly cited.
• The article doesn't seem to mention where he is buried and I think that this would be good to have if known.
  • Agree, I'll see if a newspaper article mentions it - the ones I've seen dealt with the crash though, not his funeral.

Other than these few mostly petty things the article is very well written. Good Job. --Kumioko (talk) 20:16, 8 April 2010 (UTC) Reviewer: Kumioko (talk) 20:16, 8 April 2010 (UTC)

Tks for taking the time to review, Kumioko, will get on to these later today. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 21:53, 8 April 2010 (UTC)

All my concerns have been met. This article is passed as GA, well done. --Kumioko (talk) 13:43, 9 April 2010 (UTC)

Many thanks, Kumioko -- Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 14:05, 9 April 2010 (UTC)