Talk:Leech/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 21:18, 4 July 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for taking this on. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 04:55, 5 July 2018 (UTC)

• I'll review this soon; a leech once latched onto my finger as a kid, this will be my revenge... FunkMonk (talk) 21:18, 4 July 2018 (UTC)
• First off, I'm surprised there isn't a better photo n the article of a leech doing what a leech is known for? Showing the mouth of the leech in contact with a victim well (animal or human).

I looked around and coulbn't find anything much suitable. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 18:51, 5 July 2018 (UTC)

How about this?[1] Or this disgusting one:[2] I just searched for "leech sucking" on Commons... The categories can be pretty useless sometimes. I just created the new category "feeding leeches" for such:[3] FunkMonk (talk) 19:47, 5 July 2018 (UTC)

• There is a good deal of terms that should be linked, in the diversity section alone I see clitellate, proboscis, annelids, European medical leech, ectoparasites, coelom, perhaps look for others throughout.

• Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:04, 9 July 2018 (UTC)

• "based on molecular analysis" Might be good to give a date.

• Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:04, 9 July 2018 (UTC)

• Paraphyletic, ocelli could be explained. I also see a bunch of other technical terms that could be explained (especially in the latter part of anatomy).

• Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:04, 9 July 2018 (UTC)

• I think we need some text about their evolutionary history. When did they evolve, fossil record, etc.

• Added. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:04, 9 July 2018 (UTC)

• What does the scientific name mean?

• Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:04, 9 July 2018 (UTC)

• What does "other" signify in the cladogram?

• Removed one, left the other - presumably the remaining members of the group not mentioned below. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:04, 9 July 2018 (UTC)

• Yes, the supposedly separate groups "Polychaeta" and "Oligochaeta" overlap with each other and with Lumbriculidae, so they're not clades. Have clarified the labels. Chiswick Chap (talk) 05:53, 13 July 2018 (UTC)

• "dorso-ventrally" I don't thin most people know what this means. From top to bottom or similar could be an alternative. Perhaps some of the other anatomical location terms could be reworked too.

• Explained, but a leech is a bit tricky in this respect, not having a clear top or bottom. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:04, 9 July 2018 (UTC)

• "the two main ones at the side, with others dorsally and ventrally" For example here, you mix common and anatomical terms, why not just use common terms?

• Done. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:04, 9 July 2018 (UTC)

• "the coelom is reduced to four small longitudinal channels", "The coelom is reduced to four continuous slender channels" Does this have to repeated at length in the same section?

• Removed. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 20:04, 9 July 2018 (UTC)

• "The cocoon of Hemibdella soleae is attached to a suitable fish host,[15] and that of a branchiobdellid, to the shell of a crayfish." So does this mean the young feed on those hosts, or what is the use?

• Both now explained.

• "The leech secretes an anticoagulant, hirudin" and "secrete an anticoagulant peptide, hirudin" is this repetition necessary?

• Fixed.

• The latter part of Feeding and digestion is extremely technical, I wonder if some of it could be summarised further or simplified.

• Reduced.

• "fuse to give the caudal ganglion" I wonder if "fuse to form" may make more sense.

• Done.

• I assume this is UK English, but I see both ise and ize, such as "fossilise" and "recognized", among others. Should be made consistent.

• Done.

• I wonder if all those external links are really needed.

• Zapped.

• "Predatory leeches feed on small invertebrates such as snails, earthworms and insect larvae." Could be nice with a similar list of what lifeforms other leeches feed on.

Host preferences vary with the phylogeny, and are mentioned in that section. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:54, 13 July 2018 (UTC)

• Alright, I think this looks good now, passed. FunkMonk (talk) 15:20, 14 July 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for undertaking the review. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 17:23, 14 July 2018 (UTC)