Talk:Lee Guetterman/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:24, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
Am reviewing for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 19:24, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- a (reference section):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
General
[edit]- I believe all uses of the word "majors" should be changed to "major leagues"
Lead
[edit]- "Drafted by the Mariners in the in the fourth round of the 1981 Major League Baseball (MLB) Draft," - the text in bold is a repetition
- "before getting moved to the bullpen due to a loss of control." - loss of control of what?
- I think the lead could be three paragraphs instead of two; how about making the new paragraph after he became unhappy with his playing time
- "though he was in the minor leagues until June 30." - add that year to the end of this sentence for clarification
Early life
[edit]- "Arthur Lee Guetterman was born November 22, 1958, to Arthur Adam Jr. and Ruth Guetterman.[1][2]" - the first citation can be moved to the comma because it does not mention his parents
- "Arthur Lee Guetterman was born November 22, 1958," - born on November 22,
- "where he was coached on the baseball team by former major league pitcher Al Worthington.[4][3]" - refs in numerical order please
First full season, use as a starter (1986–87)
[edit]- "16 of his 41 appearances for Seattle" - don't start a sentence with a digit
- Wikilink bullpen to the relevant article
Emerging as a relief pitcher, closing, leading the Yankees in wins (1988–90)
[edit]- "because of an injury to Ron Guidry." - The LA Times said Guidry's injury was to his left elbow
- "Sure enough, Righetti went on to assume the closer role" - use alternative formal wording in place of the text in bold or delete it
- Wikilink go-ahead home run to the relevant article
- Home run is already linked on first mention. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 17:51, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
Dissatisfaction with workload, trade to the Mets (1991–92)
[edit]- "then earned ones in back-to-back appearances July 1 and 4," - achieved saves in back-to-back appearances on July 1 and 4,
- "As it turned out," - transpired
- "in a 2016 interview." - interview with whom?
- No interviewee is shown in the video, but I don't think that's relevant here - the main point of this sentence is that in 2016, Guetterman thought New York was his favorite place that he had played. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 17:54, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
Various organizations (1993–97)
[edit]- "Guetterman was then unemployed for over a month before signing with the Mariners again on August 8." - more than a month
- "earning the save (his only one of the season) in the victory." - earning him his sole save of the season in the victory
- "when Tim Davis broke his leg." - The Spokesman-Review says it was his left leg that was broken
- "Blas Minor then relieved him and retired Rex Hudler to end the inning." - subsequently
- "finally getting a chance to start again." - reword this sentence slightly
Career statistics and pitching style
[edit]- "Guetterman threw a curveball as well.[19][14]" - refs in numerical order please
Personal life
[edit]- "due to the preaching and spiritual study he received while a Liberty student. "I made that commitment at Liberty."[19][3]" - refs in numerical order please
References
[edit]- Reference 51 should mention the agency
Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 15:06, 15 October 2020 (UTC)
- @Sanfranciscogiants17: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 19:31, 15 October 2020 (UTC)