Jump to content

Talk:LeRoy Prinz/GA1

Page contents not supported in other languages.
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

[edit]

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Taylor Trescott (talk · contribs) 02:51, 3 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll do this one. Time to cut the "media and drama" backlog. Taylor Trescott - my talk + my edits 02:51, 3 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

  • The lead should only be 2 paragraphs per WP:LEAD.
  • It also should be rejigged. Prinz had 3 Oscar nominations; this should be one of the first things mentioned and yet it's not there.
  • Lead should use his middle name
  • "Leroy Jerome Prinz" not LeRoy?
  • ""introducing the American strut step" only needs one "
  • "during World War I" you said this earlier in the paragraph
  • Why does the Career section not mention his three Oscar nominations?
  • His Golden Globe win is also not mentioned
  • Two paragraphs in "Career" are not sourced
  • Any info on his personal life? IMDB says he had a kid named LeRoy Jr.

Overall I think this is close to meeting the GA criteria and will place it on hold. Taylor Trescott - my talk + my edits 21:27, 3 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

 Done Thanks very much for reviewing this. Coretheapple (talk) 13:39, 8 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]