Talk:LeRoy Prinz/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Taylor Trescott (talk · contribs) 02:51, 3 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

I'll do this one. Time to cut the "media and drama" backlog. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 02:51, 3 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

The lead should only be 2 paragraphs per WP:LEAD.
It also should be rejigged. Prinz had 3 Oscar nominations; this should be one of the first things mentioned and yet it's not there.
Lead should use his middle name
"Leroy Jerome Prinz" not LeRoy?
""introducing the American strut step" only needs one "
"during World War I" you said this earlier in the paragraph
Why does the Career section not mention his three Oscar nominations?
His Golden Globe win is also not mentioned
Two paragraphs in "Career" are not sourced
Any info on his personal life? IMDB says he had a kid named LeRoy Jr.

Overall I think this is close to meeting the GA criteria and will place it on hold. Taylor Trescott - ^{my talk} + _{my edits} 21:27, 3 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Done Thanks very much for reviewing this. Coretheapple (talk) 13:39, 8 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]