Talk:La Dama Enmascarada/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:51, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
Am reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 09:51, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Lead
[edit]- "Caballero was a relative of professional wrestler Irma González as well as González's daughter Irma Aguilar although it is unclear exactly how they were related." - seems odd. In the infobox, it states that she is niece to Irma González. Please clarify this
- "She started out as a masked wrestler," - began her career
- "but lost her mask in 1958 to Irma González, but would later wrestle under the mask again." - repetition of the word "but"
Biography
[edit]- "Caballero was born into a circus family" - she
- Wikilink boxing promoters to Promoter (entertainment)
Professional wrestling career
[edit]- "including Magdalena Caballero. Caballero would work" Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this.
- "Her reign lasted less than a year as Irma González won the championship later that year." - in 1955.
- "she would at times wrestle under her real name and at other times still use the "La Dama Enmascarada" name," - and sometimes the
- "After the mask loss" - the loss of her mask,
- "despite not being masked anymore." - no longer being masked.
- "Due to very few records of wrestling from that period of time" - from that time period
- "it's uncertain who defeated La Dama" - it is uncertain as to who
- "On January 22, 1961, La Dama Enmascarada evened the score with Irma González" - the text in bold is not particularly encyclopedic
- "as she teamed up with Chabela Romero to take on the team of Irma González and Toña la Tapatía" - repetition of "team"
- "Empresa Mexicana de Lucha Libre (EMLL) show in Guadalajara." - the acroynms are not needed since they are not repeated elsewhere
Personal life
[edit]- "Caballero and husband Andrés Ramos had a total of six children together before their divorce in the 1950s" - the text in bold is not needed
- "Magdalena Caballero died on March 11, 2006," - what did she die from? Do we know?
References
[edit]- It looks like that Reference 1 is missing the page number that the story can be found on
Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 10:59, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
- MWright96 thank you for your review, I will look over the comments and made the appropriate updates. Note, I am going to be quite busy over the weeekend so I may not get to the feedback for a day or two. MPJ-DK (talk) 16:10, 25 April 2020 (UTC)
- MWright96 sorry it took me a bit, I had to e-mail someone who could actually see the archives of the newspaper since the article they sent me way back did not include the page number. I got it all that I believe I've addressed all issues. MPJ-DK (talk) 01:31, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
- @MPJ-DK: Now promoting to GA class; I've made one small change to the prose. MWright96 (talk) 08:08, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
- MWright96 sorry it took me a bit, I had to e-mail someone who could actually see the archives of the newspaper since the article they sent me way back did not include the page number. I got it all that I believe I've addressed all issues. MPJ-DK (talk) 01:31, 29 April 2020 (UTC)