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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:14, 22 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]


Taking a look now. I will make straigthforward coyedits as I go (please correct me if I accidentally change the meaning) and jot questions below:

  • He has maintained a strong presence in social media, most notably with over 3.4 million followers on Instagram. - let facts speak for themselves. I'd trim this section to, "Known as a popular but polarizing basketball figure, Ball has over 3.4 million followers on Instagram. "
  • He is one of the most publicized high school-aged basketball players with a signature shoe by his father's company Big Baller Brand and a role on the Facebook reality show Ball in the Family. - a comma after "players"..?
  • ''The brand was inspired by LaMelo and his brothers Lonzo and LiAngelo - I'd remove this line, it's sort of obvious and sort of superfluous.
  • .... called the Melo Ball 1 (MB1), which will be available in late 2017. - needs correct tense. "was to be available.." or something.

Overall it's pretty comprehensive. The main risk is that parts might veer into promotional-sounding territory, but I think I have found all examples of that....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:45, 23 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]

  • For the record, Earwigs' score is inflated due to (attributed) quotes, so that's ok.

1. Well written?:

Prose quality:
Manual of Style compliance:

2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:

References to sources:
Citations to reliable sources, where required:
No original research:

3. Broad in coverage?:

Major aspects:
Focused:

4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:

Fair representation without bias:

5. Reasonably stable?

No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA):

6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:

Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:


Overall:

Pass or Fail: - a nice read. cheers, Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:07, 25 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]