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GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 03:17, 2 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Infobox

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  • Everything looks good!

Lead

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  • Also looks good!

Paragraph 2

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  • Since this article seems to be written in American English, "favourable" should actually be "favorable"

Background and release

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  • I don't think you need to mention what each of the mixers and recorders are managed by; it seems pretty unnecessary to me

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  • Add "was" before "finally served as..."
  • Rest looks great

Composition

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  • Fix "song "sound like"... (wrong tense here)
  • "analysed" --> "analyzed"
  • You can summarize and/or paraphrase some of these quotes so this section isn't so dependent on them

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  • Good

Critical response

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  • "labelling" --> "labeling"
  • Please change to "Japanese music editor Random J highlighted it as one of the album's best tracks, praising it for being "funky" and "bouncy"."

Accolades and recognitions

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  • change title; "recognitions" isn't a word
  • Once again, "recognitions" isn't a word
  • "favourite" --> "favorite"
  • Is 24/25 the lowest position? Or was the poll ranking the top 24 positions?

Commercial performance

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  • You use "chart week" and "charting weeks" quite frequently; you can change it up a bit if you please
  • Remove "on the singles chart" in the second to last sentence

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  • "Billboard" needs to be italicized
  • Good elsewhere

Music video and promotion

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  • Add the year to August 2 please
  • Quote with Ref #38 needs to be a bit shorter; you can summarize/paraphrase it please

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  • Add the year to August 31 please

Chart and certifications

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  • Shouldn't the "Japan Yearly Chart" be placed in the "Year-end" format?

See also

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  • Put the first quotation mark around "Beautiful World"; you're missing it
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  • Add a MetroLyrics link to the song's official lyrics using the template; see "Make Me Like You"'s external links section for example
  • The only needed template here is "Utada Hikaru songs", not "Utada Hikaru" since the song is not linked in the template

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Another good article, on hold for seven days; thanks! Carbrera (talk) 20:13, 2 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: All done and dusted Regarding the recording part in the background section, I removed the mixing/editing part but left the studio recording in. CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 04:41, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]