Talk:Key House

GA Review

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Reviewer: Bruxton (talk · contribs) 16:22, 5 March 2024 (UTC)

Review

I am happy to review this article.Bruxton (talk) 16:22, 5 March 2024 (UTC)

@APK: I think I have completed the review and I await your edits and response. Bruxton (talk) 22:31, 5 March 2024 (UTC)

@APK: Thank you. I will be traveling tomorrow so if we have a delay I will not get back to the nomination until the 18th. Bruxton (talk) 18:35, 6 March 2024 (UTC)

Sorry for the delay @Bruxton:, I've had real life events keeping me occupied. I'll work on this today. APK hi :-) (talk) 19:32, 13 March 2024 (UTC)

Ok, I think all of your concerns have been addressed. By the way, thanks for taking the time to review the article. APK hi :-) (talk) 20:37, 13 March 2024 (UTC)

Lead

Y Consider adding a {{short description|?}}

Y "The house is where Key left in September 1814 to retrieve a kidnapped doctor during the War of 1812" consider "In September 1814 Key left this house to retrieve a kidnapped doctor during the War of 1812" or something that reads better?

Y The lead presents a good summary of the article and all of the information is repeated and cited in the body

Grammar

Y the kitchen and dining room.. might be extra puncuation

Y "destruction to the area when British attacked the nation's capital" British probably needs a determiner "the"

Y "Key learnt of a doctor" might be better to use American English because the subject is American

Y "renamed the The Star-Spangled Banner," extra determiner

Y "great-grandon" spelling

Y "The Key House in 1931 showing the drastic" consider shows

Y "Key-Smith said" should be followed by a comma

Y " offered the suggestion of" consider replacing with just "suggested"

Y "approximately 5O per cent" percent should be one word - and 50 may be using a letter "o"?

Y "NPS historian Barry Mackintosh said" should be followed by a comma

Y "said to be two-feet (0.6 m) thick while interior walls were eighteen-inches (46 cm) thick." consider 2 ft (0.61 m) and 18 in (46 cm)

Y "floorplan" for this use should probably be two words

Y "fell far short of the $25,000 goal" consider an inflation template ({{Inflation|US|2000|1977|r=0|fmt=eq}})

{ok}} Same as above "at a cost of $100,000"

Y Same as above "In 1948, Congress approved $65,00"

Y It is not a must but you can consider adding these templates to dollar figures. I find them interesting

Y "Perched on a slope beside the Potomac River, the house was three-and-a-half stories tall facing the river, with the façade being two-and-a-half stories" consider "The home was perched on a slope beside the Potomac River. It was three-and-a-half stories tall and it faced the river; the façade was two-and-a-half stories

Y "In addition to his work in law," consider in addition to his legal work or similar

Y "Beanes, that had been arrested by British troops" consider "who had been"

Y "renamed the The Star-Spangled Banner, which is the national anthem of the United States" consider "which later became the national anthem of the United States"

Y "argued for the defense of slavery" consider "in defense"

Y "he left the public spotlight" seems colloquial consider "left public life"

Y "After Key's death in 1843" to avoid repetition consider "In the years following Key's death in 1843" or similar

Y "by his heirs for around ten years" can we nail down a specific time?

Y "Due to its location in an undesirable area at the time" this line seems clumsy and inexact, consider rewriting

Y "altered the Key House's appearance" consider rewrite to "altered the appearance of the Key House"

Y "Amongst the donated items" We should use American English as mentioned above

Y "The plan was to demolish it all" the language here is inexact, consider being specific

Y "but after a local outcry about saving" here outcry seems colloquial and not encyclopedic

Y "raising funds to restore the house fell far short" fell far short, consider more exact encyclopedic language

Y "The Key House was a brick colonial that was two-and-a-half stories" consider "and" instead of "that"

Citations

Y Early history section Citation 1 supports the text

Y Citations 2 and 3 are offline AGF

Y War of 1812 section citations support the text

Y Citation 5 supports the text well-known, the citation says famous

Y Key's life after the war - citations match the text

Y Mid-to-late 19th-century spot checked citations match the text

Y Keep in mind that the sourceThe Daily Beast WP:DAILYBEAST is yellow so it cannot be used for controversial information. I see that you used it for three items - all uncontroversial

Y Mid-to-late 19th-century - the last sentence in this section - you have interpreted the reference in the best way possible. .

Y 20th-century the first, second, third, fouth paragraph citations line up with text

Y 20th-century The section and much of the article rely on citation 1 - but all of the citations line up in with the text

Y Final years spot checked citations in the section line up

Y Memorial park section, I am unable tom access the citations AGF

Y Design citations support the text

Y Earwig is at 50% and it is because the nominator used several long quotes. Not an issue

Images

Y File:Key House 1931.jpg is a non free and the summary and license seems incomplete. I updated it with appropriate language

Y There are 9 images in the article and the other ones are properly licensed

Chart

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